What a great prompt - it gives you the opportunity to express your personal philosophy on happiness. You raise many good points. However, I lost my way getting to your personal philosophy - by the end of the essay, I still don't know what it is.
Your first and second sentences don't outline your philosophy:
jennyz: I think the success of the country should be measured based on how well the government is doing in maintaining social order, regulating economic balance, and keeping peace in foreign affairs.
And what I understand from your last sentence is only that you believe governments are responsible for a country's success (based on the criterion you listed.) It does not answer why you believe your personal philosophy could be used to evaluate a country's success.jennyz: In my opinion, the people's level of happiness is not always a fair indicator of the country's success because there are many outside factors that could affect "happiness". However, I agree that a country's conditions could potentially impact the happiness of the people to a certain degree.
Could you post the outline you used for this great essay? It will help to see how you organized it.
A. Smith
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