1.) What in particular about Yale has influenced your decision to apply? (100 words max.)
Besides being an institution with vast academic resources and passionate faculty, the robust spirit of volunteerism in Yale appealed to me. I would like to continue pursuing my interest in community service in college and I am drawn by the multitude of meaningful and unique student-initiated community service efforts. I am particularly interested to contribute to the Yale Hunger and Homelessness Action, as it reaches out to the impoverished directly by providing them with food and other basic necessities. This is the most symbolic act of compassion that resonates with my values and I want to surround myself with the equally compassionate participants to provide material and emotional support to the homeless.
Please respond in 250 characters (roughly 40 words) or fewer to each of the questions below:
2a.) What excites you intellectually, really?
The sophisticated functions and workings of each discrete parts of the human brain which in aggregate influence our behaviors and decisions.
2b.) Think about a disappointment you have experienced. What was your response?
Reflect on what caused the disappointment, keep the lesson in mind, and move on.
2c.) Suite-style living - four to six students sharing a set of rooms - may be an integral part of your Yale College experience. What would you contribute to the dynamic of your suite?
I would probably be the clown of our suite. I would also be the cleanliness "advocate" of the suite, but my roommates would ignore me when I nag them to tidy up the room.
2d.) What do you wish you were better at being or doing?
I wish I can be more poised in the face of tough situations.
Your language and prose definitely shows high command of the English language, which Yale would just love!
I think 2b is asking for a more specific response, but that is just my opinion
Future Bulldog here! Your responses are very straightforwards and mature, which is great, but it also comes off as a tad detached in some cases. Maybe you can work on a little warmth so that your other responses don't nullify what you say in 2c) about being the "clown." And yes, 2b) should be more specific. In my case, I wrote about being diagnosed with scoliosis and how I managed it. The short takes are your chance to show them who you are as a person, so utilize it to the max!
Thanks. I was wondering what you thought of the Why Yale response?
Also, I would love to hear vangiespen 's feedback on these questions.
Your answers show a high degree of intellect and grasp of the American English language. Your response work well in relation to the prompt. Direct and informative. I don't believe that any fault can be found in your responses since these are so short. It is creatively and entertainingly written. Definitely a reflection of your personality :-)
Thanks for your feedback vangiespen.
I was wondering if you could feedback on my Penn College essay as well, as that essay's deadline is approaching.
I love your responses! But for 2b I think you should be more specific. Like what exactly was the type of disappointment and how did you react to it.
Hope I helped!
