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Dec 17, 2008, 07:20am   #
Hi, I wrote the below essay for another university, but intend to use it for one of the UW-Madison essays. I would like to ask for some help to take a look if this essay answers the prompt adequately or do I need to change/improve any parts to better suit the essay question.

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If there is additional information you would like us to consider in reviewing your application, please share this with us as well. This is your opportunity to tell us things about yourself that have not been asked elsewhere if you believe they will help us become acquainted with you in ways different from courses, grades, and test scores.

Among all of my qualities and talents, I feel that diligence, responsibility and perseverance are the most important qualities to me. It provided me with an opportunity to develop myself into a person that is highly motivated and eager to participate in new tasks and challenges.

From a young age, I have always had a keen interest in monetary matters and have developed a genuine interest in the field of economics. Thus, when I entered junior college two years ago, I decided to take up economics as one of my subjects to build up fundamentals and prepare myself for college courses. Indeed, I was intrigued by the mechanisms behind those economic concepts and the analytical approach required by the study of economics. However, as this subject was one which I had never taken before, thus there was a long time when I struggled with my economics classes. Nevertheless, I told myself that I should not throw in the towel that easily; instead I made it a challenge for myself and set it as the obstacle that I had to face.

I understand that being responsible for my studies and putting my best foot forward are essential if I want to excel in this subject. I realize that if my grades did not meet my standards, it just mean that I did not try hard enough; I did not study hard enough. I want to be the protagonist in my own life instead of being an antagonist. My ambitions for college have been cultivated in this vision of always studying and advancing and any obstacle obstructing me must be defeated. Therefore, with my passion for economics and sheer determination, I kept myself busy by reading up more on economics reference books, economic- related magazines and consulting my economics tutor in my own time. My resolve was proven when I finally managed to break the glass ceiling and receive outstanding grades for economics. I continued to receive good grades in this subject for the duration of my study in junior college. Now I am proud of myself. Overcoming these challenges taught me about persistence and about being unfaltering in the face of adversities. Today, I would often try to push myself even more so that I can face new opponents and when I want to pursue something, I will charge forward like an enraged ram, dashing until my ambitions are met.

Every new struggle and challenge changes a person. It breeds character and prepares the individual for the next obstacle in the game of life. My background has allowed me to have the ability to take pride in my work and appreciate the opportunities I have been presented with. With the confidence and unbreakable perseverance I have developed triumphing over all of these difficulties, I know these qualities will help me excel in college and it will undoubtedly allow me to succeed in any facet of life.
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Thank you very much for helping me :)

Among all of my qualities and talents, I feel that diligence, responsibility and perseverance are the most important qualities. They provide me with an opportunity to develop myself into a person that is highly motivated and eager to participate in new tasks and challenges.


Thus, when I entered junior college two years ago, I decided to take up economics as one of my subjects to build up the fundamentals and prepare myself for college courses.

However, as this subject was one which I had never taken before, there was a long time in which I struggled with my economics classes.

Great last paragraph!
Good luck.

:)
Dec 18, 2008, 06:26am   #
I'm starting on another UW essay. However, I'm not very sure how to go about writing the essay. I would like to know if we have to talk about all 5 aspects ("life experiences, perspectives, talents, commitments and/or interests"), or can we just choose one to two of them to write about in our essay. Thank you!

Below is the question:

The University values an educational environment that provides all members of the campus community with opportunities to grow and develop intellectually, personally, culturally and socially. In order to give us a more complete picture of you as an individual, please tell us about the particular life experiences, perspectives, talents, commitments and/or interests you will bring to our campus. In other words, how will your presence enrich our community?
Dec 19, 2008, 11:25pm   #
Please help to critique and edit this essay. I wrote this essay for another university, but I added one more paragraph in this essay for this question. I would like to seek more help with regard to the content of the essay, as I'm really not very confident whether my essay actually fit the prompt.

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The University values an educational environment that provides all members of the campus community with opportunities to grow and develop intellectually, personally, culturally and socially. In order to give us a more complete picture of you as an individual, please tell us about the particular life experiences, perspectives, talents, commitments and/or interests you will bring to our campus. In other words, how will your presence enrich our community?

As Singaporeans, we often see ourselves as essential ingredients in a "melting pot" of ideas, cultures and people. Different cultures and heritages have assimilated and evolved into this vibrant and distinct identity that embodies Singapore's blend of multi- cultural and multi- ethnic groups. This perception became apparent to me when I participated in an exchange program to China last year.

During the two- week exchange program, we were given the opportunity to interact and attend classes together with the Chinese students. We talked about almost everything under the sun, from their daily activities to the countless types of Chinese cuisines from the different regions of China. They introduced the different regional Chinese cuisines, which are collectively better known as the "Eight Great Traditions", to us while we enthralled them with the names of an entire range of local delights that are truly distinctive to Singapore; the delectable Bat Kut Teh (pork- rib soup served in a broth of Chinese herbs and spices), the fragrant Hainanese chicken rice, and the Peranakan dishes which combines Chinese, Malay, and other cultural influences into an unique flavor.

From our interesting conversations, I realized that although we all belong to the Chinese race, we are inherently different due to the diverse experiences we had for the past seventeen years. Indeed, we may look similar when viewed from afar, but upon close examination, it is obvious that each of us is unique; each is made up of separate sets of experiences and cultural backgrounds.

This exchange program has not only broadened my social horizons, but has also made me appreciate the importance and significance of cultural differences. I believe that by joining University of Wisconsin, I have so much to contribute and learn among the student body because of its great cultural diversity. Not only does UW provide me with the opportunity to achieve academic excellence but also to meet new people. I hope to share my multifaceted culture and experiences while at the same time be inspired by those of others. I believe with this understanding and appreciation, I can add to the diversity of the UW student body and prove to be a great asset to the university.

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Thank you very much in advance! :)
Dec 20, 2008, 12:04am   #
i think the essay definetly answers the prompt and its very well written the only suggestion i have is to re-word this sentence:

We talked about almost everything under the sun, from their daily activities to the countless types of Chinese cuisines from the different regions of China.

its just a little wordy with all the from's

and also:

I believe that by joining the University of Wisconsin, I have much to contribute and learn among the student body because of its great cultural diversity.
Just some corrections for this last paragraph:

I believe that by joining the University of Wisconsin, I will be in a position to contribute and learn among the student body because of its great cultural diversity. Your University can provide me with the opportunity to achieve academic excellence and also to collaborate with people in meaningful ways. I hope to share my multifaceted culture and experiences while at the same time taking inspiration from others. I believe that, with this understanding and appreciation, I can add to the diversity of the UW student body and prove to be a great asset to the university.



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