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unique qualities, Stanford Supplement-- Why is Stanford a good place for me.


swimchick2266 3 / 9  
Dec 29, 2009   #1
Tell us what makes Stanford a good place for you.

My search for that perfect college led me directly to the beautiful Stanford University. None of my parents or grandparents had the opportunity to receive a college education, so making it through high school alone would have made my family proud. However, I want to go that extra mile; I want to learn, explore, grow, and excel, and I feel like Stanford will allow me to do just that.

The components of the Stanford community which appeal to me most are the impressive programs in the social sciences, active student body, and diversity.
I have always been a goal-oriented student who thrives on competition. The competitive and rigorous learning environment at Stanford will only make me more determined to excel. The great programs in the social sciences at Stanford would help me develop my intellectual curiosity for these subjects to their full potential.

In addition to my academic achievements, I have been heavily involved in extracurricular activities throughout high school. My leadership abilities have led me to attaining key roles in those activities. Whether its community service, a club, or sport, I love to participate. I know that there are numerous opportunities to get involved at Stanford, and I would love to dive in and explore these opportunities.

I have also heard about the importance of diversity at Stanford. I want to learn amongst students from all different economic and cultural backgrounds because I believe that a wide spectrum of opinions and perspectives enhances an educational experience. I believe that my unique background and experiences could even add to that broad spectrum.

Overall, I know my academic determination, leadership abilities, and unique qualities would be a perfect fit for Stanford University.

Please give me any criticism or advice! :)
tkkt1 11 / 47  
Dec 29, 2009   #2
The three main components of the Stanford community which appealedrevise to present tense, they still appeal to you don't they? to me most were the rigorous academics, the active student body, and the diversity.

The competitive and rigorousreplace the word with a similar onelearning environment at Stanford would only make me more determined to excel.

You express yourself and your passion for Stanford well. Take my changes as suggestions.

Return the favor and read my essay please
jpg_76 3 / 18  
Dec 29, 2009   #3
you have the right idea but...
is there anything that ONLY stanford has that appeals to you
you can put harvard, or yale, or any other ivy league in place of stanford and it would fit

I believe that my unique background and experiences could even add to that broad spectrum.

what experiences and/or unique background?

im sorry if i sound harsh
Foreigner 3 / 10  
Dec 30, 2009   #4
I know that there are numerous opportunities to get involved at Stanford, and I would love to dive in and explore these opportunities.

Try to get rid of one "opportunities" here.

I believe that my unique background and experiences could even add to that broad spectrum.

what of your backgroung is unique? How could add that to the broad spectrum in particular?

All in all, a good essay, however, try to give more specific examples how YOU get involved in Stanford (a club, sport etc) and what is so special about Stanford what nobody else has.

Good Luck :-)
nikisfalling 3 / 8  
Dec 31, 2009   #5
Overall, I like it. But maybe expand a little on Stanford-specific qualities?


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