ooo~ same prompt :]
I like your first line, but it jumps from food, to cultures, to beats, and creativity...bit of a jumble
constantly inventing beats and melodies, I need time to cultivate my own creativity.
what do you mean here? isn't making beats creative? or did you mean something else
New words need to be invented to revive them
nice~ will this be your "voice"? however, what does this have to do with the next sentence about fortune cookie slips? and how does Peter Singer connect with slips of paper?
Animal lover..woah. you were just talking about food. now the beasts themselves?
have found that people aren't as full of hate as they claim.
ok..I'm sort of getting your flow; it's different to say the least. about the they here, are you saying that people claim to be hateful? or that most people are not as full of hate as many claim they are. :?
I like the "I am an amalgamation..." lol. funny. wish people could be packaged like that. would make for great new years presents.
Feedback. hm. what to say, it's a lot of information, but you don't specifically say what form your
Self-identity and personal expression take
. Also you don't quite reflect on what voice you will bring. maybe you can focus each short paragraph on those three things:
Diversity, idealism, and passion
and work to make your ideas flow more because without an intro, each idea stands on its own until an somewhat concluded ending.