If you say "Few" it means "not many"
But if you say "A few" it means "Some."
There is a big difference in meaning.
A few events in my life have changed me and made me a better person,
and my dads quest for a better life
are is a
mong the most significant of those events.
It is important to use separage paragraphs for each idea you want to express:
From then onwards everyday my dad would drive two hours and spend ten hours working for a year until that small business was running successfully without problems.
(new paragraph)
Before all this happened I
was had been in senior high school and I
didn't try not trying at a
ll. I did the bare minimum
necessary to get by and was more...
This event not only made me a better person,
but also set me up for a life full of success and education.
In high school I
already decided
that I would be following in my father's
footsteps by pursuing a ...
When you add an "extra" word to a sentence, separate it with commas:
My Macro professor, Mr.Tontz, increased my appetite...
professorsYou explained your interests very well in this second essay, but you could go a little further to discuss
experience you have had in the field
Most importantly, use paragraphs!
one paragraph = one idea, and the idea is expressed clearly in the first sentence of the paragraph.