PLEASE review and tell me how it is if i should change certain things or just scratch the whole essay and start over.
What is a doctor? What exactly do they do and why is there so much prestige associated with that profession? Well, according to the American Heritage Dictionary, a doctor is "a person, especially a physician, dentist, or veterinarian, trained in the healing arts and licensed to practice". According to me, a doctor is much more than that.
Ever since I can remember, I have always dreamt of a career in medicine and the reason is not for something small like money or prestige. The reason that I want to become a doctor is the satisfaction that I would get from knowing that I made a difference in someone's life. When one is a doctor, people look up to that individual when they are at their weakest point, and when they have no one else because a doctor helps maintain a sense of hope for the patient and his or her family. Knowing that I will be the person people turn to on their most unforgettable days, when there is no other hope and it will be my responsibility to solve their problem and possibly save a life gives me satisfaction that has much more value than any amount of money.
From the day I was born, I have never accepted failure. My parents would always tell me how when I was younger and did not know how to tie my shoes I would sit on the couch for hours trying to teach myself how to do it and ask my mom why I could not do it but everyone else could. I believe that the three most important qualities, which I possess and can make a great doctor, are having empathy, being a good listener, and being compassionate. Doctors must be able to listen to their patients problems and fully understand them by putting themselves into the patient's position. Many instances in my life have reiterated my decision to become a doctor. Of all the instances, the one that profoundly sticks out and has had the greatest influence on me is when I traveled to a remote village in India. Many of the people there were sick and malnourished but could not receive the help that they desperately sought from any type of medical professional.
By seeing these people the one thing that I always wanted to do was return there with
some sort of help and possibly educate them or at least solve a few of their problems because they are the people from which I have gained my true love of medicine and what it can do for people.
Being a doctor has much more meaning than what it is defined as. A doctor is able to guide a person through their most difficult times and provide any necessary assistance to the patient and his or her family. By possessing the qualities of perseverance, empathy, compassion, and good listening skills, I would be able to be a great doctor and help many people.
would this essay also work for this prompt: What would you, as an individual, contribute to the B.S./M.D. program at NEOUCOM? In other words, how would your participation enhance the class and the College of Medicine?
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"What is a doctor? What exactly do they do and why is there so much prestige associated with that profession? Well, according to the American Heritage Dictionary, a doctor is "a person, especially a physician, dentist, or veterinarian, trained in the healing arts and licensed to practice". Nice intro.
Hi, I edited it again and was wondering if you could give me some more feedback on it
By: Mihir Shah
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I posted the old essay last time so im going to repost the new one sorry about that. i tried to see if i could delete the one that i posted but i dont see a way to do that so i'll just post the new one. sorry
Well, according to the American Heritage Dictionary, a doctor is "a person, especially a physician, dentist, or veterinarian, trained in the healing arts and licensed to practice."
Doctors must be able to listen to their patients problems and fully understand them by putting themselves into the patient' s position.
Very nice work! I only had a couple of changes! Excellent!
When you are a doctor, people will look up to you when they are at their weakest point, and when they have no one else because a doctor helps maintain a sense of hope for the patient and his or her family.As I have stated in your essays previously, do not use "you" in formal academic writing.
It seems your essay answers the prompt effectively; you explain what you would bring to the program as well as how your contributions will effect the program. You give examples but keep it short enough that it is not too cumbersome.
