When submitting an admissions essay is it necessary to give it an effective title? If so, what do you think I should title mine?
topic: For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.
"Vires" encompasses strength of all kinds. Physical, moral, intellectual or a combination of the three creates a solid character. In my life, it is strength of character that resonates continually. Having the ability to persevere through the hard times and still hold on to my individuality is my "vires."
Through my high school experience exposure to diverse ideas, beliefs and cultures has been abundant. As a student at three thoroughly different schools I constantly stood apart due to my failure to identify with a specific, prototypical, clique. To my peers, the fact that I am African-American and do not embrace the hip-hop culture, the obvious peculiarity of being from a presumably affluent suburb but not a snob, my pride in being a Girl Scout despite my age, even my rejection of the Ebonics dialect makes me an anomaly. I refused to conform regardless of their confusion and ignorant, probing questions on why I am the way that I am. This took an intellectual, moral and physical strength that I didn't know I had. To juxtapose to my peers what it means to be black in America embodies strength. To create a dichotomy between myself and my urbanite peers and help them realize that just your skin is certain color does not constrain you to a particular set of beliefs, practices or culture.
I did not falter in the face of their resistance to my individuality. I embraced this challenge, despite the hardships and barriers, with open arms. This journey to racial identity throughout high school opened my eyes and enlightened my soul. It gave me my "vires" that will flow within me forever.
Any suggestions you have will be greatly appreciated. Thanks :)
Vires, Artes, Mores
One small thing--you didn't really discuss all three. Maybe you should.
Another thing--'juxtapose' is for ideas, not people. I understood your meaning, but the word doesn't really fit the sense. 'Contradict' might be better. The sentence is just awkward as it is.
