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Thomas Sowell Reader - Columbia Supplement - 3 short essays


makman09 9 / 86  
Dec 30, 2011   #1
Please tell us what you found meaningful about one of the above mentioned books, publications or cultural events.

The Thomas Sowell Reader reveals fascinating perspectives on many concepts that I now look differently at such as an education today being too dangerously liberal. But one perspective that interests me most is his view on welfare. In a welfare state, citizens are livestock that is fed by the government through the taxpayer's money. The welfare policies that the government produces reduce the citizen's incentive to work because through unemployment, they're guaranteed food stamps and welfare checks to live. They become veal.

I realized he is saying more than his text. When someone is given something without effort, he'll hold it with low marginal utility. With everything given with no effort in return, the incentive to confront adversity decreases. In the end, everyone in a welfare state will become couch potatoes.

For applicants to Columbia College, please tell us what attracts you specifically to the field or fields of study that you noted in the Application Data section.

My fascination of biology is sustained by one concept, how is life structured? In daily life, everyone bends their muscles, get colds, ages, and etc., but how? Biology and its many fields are the answers to the question, but the important question to ask is why do I want to know how? I want to know how life is structured because once the structure is known, it can be manipulated to yield new intentions. To clarify, HIV virus can resist drugs and medication by mutating which is why many medications work temporarily before the mutation occurs, but if one can understand the mutation patterns of the HIV virus, then progress is made. With patterns, medication against the HIV can be more effective and longer termed as the next mutation can be predicted and countered against by drug control. Just by understanding the structure of life, it can be manipulated to yield desired intentions.

Please tell us what you find most appealing about Columbia and why.

Columbia appeals to me because it nurtures a doctrine that I strongly believe in: How one sees will impact how one succeeds. While reading a Columbia student's blog, I was interested by what the student had to say about the university's core curriculum. He read The Wealth of Nations through an economist lens in one of his engineering classes and read it again through the lens of moral and political thought in Contemporary Civilization. He later replied that this core curriculum gave him a unique perspective that he could only find at Columbia University.

I'm fascinated by how Columbia puts a high emphasis on perspective in its core curriculum because I hold perspective with high marginal utility. I want to gain an education that gives me the most insightful viewpoint of the world around me so I can utilize it to further myself toward progress while still pursuing my aspiration for molecular biology and Columbia is the university that offers this in a nice package.

Tell me what you think about the essays. Does it impress you or is there room for improve. Be critical as possible.
I'll return the favor and give your essay a read. Just tell me which one you want me to focus on more.
sarahbee 1 / 49  
Dec 30, 2011   #2
i think that maybe for your first essays statement is a little strong. you never know the person who's reading your essay and there upbringing. its a risk...

love the opening statement of the second essay. I like your second essay overall. it gives good detail as to why you want to apply to CC.

Maybe you should avoid using the phrase "marginal utility" in the third essay as well. Its a really unique phrase so it is very noticeable.

hope i helped. please check out my revised princeton essay!
matthewmuliadi 1 / 12  
Dec 30, 2011   #3
Okay now I feel kinda weird with how I was able to comment quite a lot on your first and second essay but couldn't really help you much with your second essay.. I like your idea for your second essay as it is a strong and valid point. You also give a specific example which I found really interesting. And for your first two essays, I like the ideas that you have but some parts seem awkward (maybe it is just me). For your first essay I think you repeat the word 'welfare' a bit too much. But the idea is good as it also relates and goes with your third essay. Well done! just a bit of brushing up in my opinion. Just my two cents :)
BillyIon 3 / 5  
Dec 30, 2011   #4
These essays have really strong core ideas, but for the second essay, I think that the second half became too technical. I'd suggest emphasizing on the curiosity you presented in the first half or present something that relates to the "perspectives" you mentioned in the 3rd essay. Otherwise, very strong writing.
insanesoul81994 10 / 30  
Dec 31, 2011   #5
I think the three essays are great since they really show more about you and thats what adcoms want to see. But since you aren't going to be an Econ major, I don't really think you should use the phrase marginal utility in two of your essays unless it fits PERFECTLY in both conditions.
ashatan 4 / 25  
Dec 31, 2011   #6
They are all good, although some polishing is still necessary. The first one is a bit risky, and the AO may find terms like 'livestock' a bit extreme or even be offended. Take some more care with that- its fine to express this in conversation, but on an application, you need to know that you can end up with any kind of sensitive person, or someone who does not agree. The biology one is nice, and is not as generic as most I've read by Biology majors- spice it up a bit and make it more personal, though...The last one is the best, and I really have no suggestions for that one. Good job! Good luck:)


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