The usual prompt of many colleges. Write an essay in which you tell us about someone who has made an impact on your life and explain how and why this person is important to you.
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TESLA
There were always some names, but none of them could influence me much
more than his name. Nikola Tesla is a unifying force in my mind, not only by
his massive works of science, but also by his distinguished personality. His
presence on my being has had very significant impacts on all aspects of my
life. His vision that goes beyond imaginable world made me more open-minded,
his commitment to what he believed lead my devotion to my works and the
authentic character of him inspired mine.
Every time Nikola Tesla declared his plans in public, he was criticized
by being unrealistic. In 1892, Nikola Tesla successfully managed to create a
basic design for the radio. What astonished people was that there was a robot
with an antenna, which transmitted the radio waves. As he claimed, waves could
be transmitted without wires. This invention captivated the whole world. I am
enchanted by his approach to his aims; he assumes they will come through even
though there weren't any colons to support his thesis at that time. To dream it
was the first and most crucial step before creating any tangible scheme for his
works. He wasn't a mad scientist. His belief in what people called '
absurd ' was indeed an unseen vision of his thinking. What he did see wasn't
the next step of his experiments but the future. He never let his ideas stuck
in a cage but he set them free because innovations could only be made if he
nomads out of prison of limited visions. After diffusing into his mentality, I
become a very unique person in terms of ideas. In my physics class, instead of
just memorizing formulas-that was what our teachers wanted us to do-I started
to derive them and amazed all of my teachers. I sensed how scientists created
those formulas and then connected to each other. I've read about groundbreaking
aims of scientists such as Einstein and began to think about their dreams as
those ideas may come through one day. Realizing that anything, including things
seem impossible, is possible, I started to admit that any idea of mine is
indeed tangible and feasible as long as I have those ideas.
Tesla had many difficulties during his life. He suffered from many
physical and psychological diseases. To resist against those issues, he showed
an incredible desire and endurance to not allow his illnesses stop him. He
assumed that there are no barriers for his success. I was in high school when I
first met Tesla. My physics teacher was talking about him like a regular
person, telling that he was just the father of the some physics formulas. I
remembered I came home and looked up on the internet. What I found out was that
he was indeed million times bigger than my teacher descriptions. There was no
scale to depict his size. He was a scientist who reached his dreams with full
desire instead of fear. Tesla was one of the fewest scientists fully devoted to
his dreams. A scientist that people tried to end his reign just because
they were afraid of his ideas that go beyond the reality, however, Tesla never
let anyone stop him. As I've read about him, I've become stable, durable, and
strong. Whenever I have a barrier, like a health issue or a discouragement
caused by people, I remembered of him and kept fighting.
When he did engage in a social life, many people spoke very positively and
admiringly of him. Robert Underwood Johnson described him as attaining a
"distinguished sweetness, sincerity, modesty, refinement, generosity, and
force." His loyal secretary, Dorothy Skerrit, wrote: "his genial smile and
nobility of bearing always denoted the gentlemanly characteristics that were so
ingrained in his soul." How is it possible for a man that has experienced
numerous physical and psychological diseases, had many barriers and hardships
in his life, but still could remain like this? The smiley face I have and the
kindness I serve people are mostly his effects on me. When I feel
depressed, stressed or have low morale, I remember of him and let myself
change.
I wish I could witness his life to see more of him. I even wish I could
have chance to work with him. Despite the fact that he died, I believe that I
can still work with him because to work with someone may not necessarily
mean that you need that person alive; you only need the presence of this person
in your mind and should follow or support their vision in life.
I told you not only about myself but also about Tesla. The reason why I talked that much about Tesla is that people don't really know who he really is and what he did during his life. I'll try to cut some information about Tesla, so that'll show how he contributed me in a more efficient way.
what about grammer and sentence structure? am i fluent?
Yes, I think you should have half of it be about Tesla and half of it be about you -- its impact, and why it is important to you.
When I feel depressed or stressed, or when I have low morale, I remember of him and let myself change.
To resist against those circumstances , he showed an incredible desire and endurance to not allow his illnesses stop him.
You write very well!!
