It is no doubt that
There is no doubt that
every technology have own benefits and drawbacks
technology has both benefits and drawbacks.
when a country develops its technology, people loss our customs, traditions and cultures
technological development leads to the loss of customs, traditions and cultures.
but I think
You can start a new sentence from here.
how effected to
how they affect.
The development of technology should learn more new things
This sentence makes no sense. What do you mean by "learn more new things"?
children are become more dependent on technology
We turn to other sides of technology is their more advantages than disadvantages.
This has grammatical issues.
On the other hand, people can derive huge benefits from technology.change our lifestyles and make better than we live in present.
Technology plays an important role in bettering people's lives.
causes of
because of
should only
helps
my own personal belief
I believe
technology can only changes and modifies our traditions not to destroy our traditional values
You didn't mention it clearly in your essay.
Your essay is too short. This task 2 essay should include at least 250 words. Also, it would be better if you could pay attention to your grammar.
Hope this helps!