I would be able to make the community of the University of Washington different by bringing my experience of piano and my knowledge of the languages taught to me at my high school.
<I think you maybe want to reword this sentenceeach one provided a lot of details of its origins.
Maybe you should list some specific things you've learned from African/Chinese music. In one sentence, write how they're similar and different.
I was able to learn a lot about the traditions and customs of each country's main heritages.
Once again, just be a little more specific.
Overall I think it's amazing that you're so culturally aware. That's very unique and very admirable. I think all you really need to do is make your essay a little less vague. You have up to 500 words. Don't be scared to use more of them!Good luck! And don't worry about editing my stuff, haha. They've already been submitted.