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Short term and long term goals for ISB student


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Jul 18, 2010, 05:31pm   #
Thanks for your invaluable inputs. I will update my essay as per the suggestions.

Could you please review my 2nd Essay.


What are your short term and long term goals? How will the ISB help you achieve the same? (300 words max)

My short term goal is to enhance my knowledge in various functions like Finance, Marketing, Entrepreneurship, Leadership, and Operations and connect the various dots to analyze how each of them impact each other to make any organization successful. I plan to achieve my short term goal by learning through an established curriculum, from peers and faculty who are already real life consultants to leading companies. This way I will be able to shorten my learning cycle. I believe that ISB will help me in achieving my short term goal through interaction with peers in formal and informal channels, established curriculum and world class faculty.

Having worked on the processes side in various industries, such as Insurance, Banking, Healthcare, Auto, Communication and Entertainment, Industrial domain, and Insurance brokerage I would also take the opportunity at ISB to learn about specific industry in detail.

My long term goal is to one day achieve the highest position, in a company, so as to complete the full circle of the professional life cycle. In my long term goal, I visualize myself to be making business generating decisions at institution-wide level and drafting Corporate and Business Strategies, critical towards the success of any organization. These decisions should reflect a successful commercial model and high integrity in my own company.

During my ISB stint I will learn from real life examples about setting up companies, case studies on marketing and finance, and various phases of a company. I will be able to completely focus one year in learning not only through books and articles, but also discuss with people who have helped other companies implement them. At ISB, I will also form professional and personal network for life, and will also know where to look for information and how to interpret it when required.
I had to move this essay to its own thread. :-) Please start a new thread for every essay.

This is very good writing! I know what it needs: forging.

Like forging a sword, you can make this stronger and stronger by compressing each paragraph into a sentence or two.

I challenge you to shorten the first paragraph into 2 sentences, and put it with the this part: Having worked on the processes side in various industries, such as Insurance, Banking, Healthcare, Auto, Communication and Entertainment, Industrial domain, and Insurance brokerage I would also take the opportunity at ISB to learn about specific industry in detail.

Make it one strong paragraph full of information.

Try to shorten the rest, too:

My long term goal is to one day achieve the highest position, in a company, so as ...---- not specific enough.
... making business generating decisions at institution-wide level and drafting Corporate and Business Strategies, critical towards the success of any organization. --- not specific enough.
--- this paragraph is very general. Slash it from the essay to make room for something that will interest the reader... tell the reader a story about something; intrigue the reader. Write about your recent insights about business and why it is meaningful. Be philosophical, make predictions, and share a vision.

During my ISB stint I will learn from real life examples about setting up companies, case studies on marketing--- this part is very good! Very good detail. Consider using this as the first paragraph rather than the last.



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