Hello everyone. Please, help me to improve this essay: after editing I still feel redundancy and some lack of fluency.
As any self-made man, I am man of work, and my entire world is built on it. At school and institute I spend my time solving math problems, studying physics, creating total syntheses and working at the lab. Like a Ptolemaic universe, this part of my world consists of many spheres: sport, family, friends, math, chemistry and scientific work. I have my own music to enhance my mind (though I like old classic) - when my "spheres" are in harmony, they produce it by themselves. It is the world which I created with my own hands, like mechanic of old days. I love to solve problems from Chemistry Olympiads at school and teach next generation of passionate young chemists how to create chemical monsters like taxol from simple building blocks. After few hours of such work syntheses just come to my head, every step clearly defined and every molecule more meaningful than hundreds of words. All I have to do is to write them down on the board and bring them to life in my lab.
Nevertheless, there is another part of my world, which I created only for myself. When I am fed up with syntheses and even sport, I read. I read everything that I find interesting and meaningful, from works of ancient saints to science fiction. It allows my mind to flow and absorb new ideas and concepts. I often forget that there is more about the world than chemistry and sport, and this part of me helps me to keep my humanity intact and remember about people around me, my dreams and purpose of my life.
There are some punctuation errors : before and you need a comma(,) when counting more than 2 things.
The concept is good, I easily felt myself connected with it. However, I recommend you to search for more specific details about your life to make them pay more attention to your essay and make it attractive.
