This is my last essay for the common app. Any suggestions on how to make this essay stronger/stand out are greatly appreciated.
Please provide a statement (250 words minimum) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.
Attending the NYU's BFA Program of Dramatic Writing would be the opportunity of a lifetime for me. It is my dream to become a playwright/screenwriter. However, I do not yet have the sophistication, knowledge, and wisdom necessary to succeed as a writer. I feel that NYU, above all others, can guide me toward that goal.
I am a first generation college student and very committed to my education. I have successfully completed my freshman year at UCSB and I feel that I have matured tremendously in that time. The most important trait that I have learned from being independent for the first time, deals with being a cosmopolitan person. I have lived, studied and worked alongside students from diverse nationalities and religions. The key is to become a master of communication with teachers and fellow students, all of whom are a part of the community at UCSB. I would bring the value of this insight and maturity with me to NYU, thus ensuring my success while there.
What sets the BFA Program apart from all other writing programs offered is that it actually allows me to live the life of a writer, while continually learning. The workshops and discussions with agents and producers would not only improve my writing, but teach me the mindset of the people I will work with in the future.
Where will I be in the next ten years? I could be a successful writer for a premier sitcom like "Saturday Night Live" or I could be in a London flat creating the next great play. Whatever I end up doing, NYU's BFA Program of Dramatic Writing will be the first step in achieving my goals.