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"Progress and Service" what does that mean to you?


CaptainCook 6 / 14 1  
Sep 21, 2014   #1
Everyone wakes up in the morning hoping to achieve something in life. That 'something' is what keeps them going every day. In my case, it is my desire to progress as a human being. Change is not always progress, but progress requires change. For me, progress means a change that you make in your life to be a better version of yourself. But progress on its own, without any purpose will become meaningless. That is why I believe progress and service are dependent of each other. Being able to contribute back to society as you develop doesn't just give value to progress, but it is also an act of gratitude to society for everything they have done for us.
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Sep 21, 2014   #2
CaptainCook, you need to tell us if this is a word or character limited essay because the essay you provided is too short. So we need to know the criteria we should use to review it. When considered in terms of being a word limited essay, the paper is acceptable enough in the sense that it offers a short common definition and a personal definition of the term. As a full length essay though, the paper is problematic.

The problem is that this paragraph only serves as an introduction with your thesis statement. It cannot be considered a full paper. Also, the topic of "progress" and "service" should have been discussed as individual paragraphs prior to being discussed in connection with one another. So if you need a full essay composed of at least 3-5 paragraphs and 250-300 words, your essay needs to a big-time revision. Otherwise, it is fine as it is :-)

Please load the criteria for the review of your statement at the soonest possible time so that we can do a better review of the content. We are looking forward to giving you a more accurate review very soon :-)
OP CaptainCook 6 / 14 1  
Sep 21, 2014   #3
Hi there! Thanks for the feedback. It is one of the question by Georgia tech for freshmen applicants and it has a limit of 150 words


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