personal/professional goals--"Chemical Engineering"-PURDUE ESSAY

Describe how your Purdue education would support the attainment of your personal and/or professional goals

As I look back into the past through my kaleidoscope, I see someone who was different than most people in terms of interest and worldly understanding. This "kid" is me. I now see something changing in my field of vision, the chemistry is changing, and I see the event that led to my deep interest of the chemical compositions that surround us. In this event, what had happened was that while all of my friends were playing baseball outside, I was carefully examining a live chemical reaction on the kitchen floor: hydrogen peroxide and Iodine. From this moment on, I knew that I wanted to learn more about the chemical world. Now, as I am older, I realize that a University such as Purdue can harbor my interests because of its top of the line education in chemical engineering and its philosophy of excellence as well. I know that Purdue's education is difficult and demanding, but in my life I have solved many problems, both educational and life problems as well, and I feel that Purdue will only help me obtain my goal of becoming a chemical engineer.

When I look back through my kaleidoscope, I realize that I have had many academic challenged that have shaped me to who I am now. One particular challenge was obtaining the scholar's award for excellence in chemistry. Unlike many students in my class, I not only learned what was required of me, but I went far and beyond and bought books on chemistry and how vital it is to understand what our world's composition is. If I will be admitted to Purdue University, I will plan to also truly learn what I am being taught, and I know Purdue will have educators that will make sure I understand the concepts and that I will be able to apply it in real life. If there's anything I like more than understanding concepts of chemistry, it is the actual hands on experience. When I had my campus tour, I had the luxury to go into the biomedical building and see what the labs consisted of and what opportunities many of the students had. With the equipment that was available. The reason why this is crucial for me is because many jobs in the chemical engineering world require an understanding of how to apply the knowledge of what is taught in the classroom to the lab as well.

As I look into my nostalgic past through my kaleidoscope, I see all of the social problems I faced as a child. One particular event was in the summer of 2001. I was walking in the scorching sun to the swing set in the school park, when two indulgent boys came up to me and threw me into a cold unforgiving pole. I screamed for a teacher to help me, but no luck. I did not feel safe in school. As I grew up, I persevered through such instances, and I learned to control the situation. I know that if I attend Purdue, there will be no such problems because it offers a sense of community-individuals that will help you in any situation you are in. this will only help me obtain my personal goal of getting to know people better as well.

Purdue will also allow me to obtain my goal of becoming a Chemical Engineer with the modern programs they have as well. In the past decade, there has been a tremendous growth of green technology, and chemistry is a big part of that, and I want to be part of that green revolution, and I know only Purdue will help me achieve that. With a degree of Chemical engineering from Purdue, I plan to research methods of having more green renewable resources that will ultimately make the lives of people easier and simpler. As I begin to realize what the future can hold for me Purdue University, slowly, but surly, do I lose hold of my childhood kaleidoscope and the memories along with it. Yet, those memories will always stay with me in my life, both how I understood how important education is, and how my personal life can change as well. I am sure that with those memories, the education and social life of Purdue University will only help me obtain my goals for the future-one being to show to people that chemistry is not just some high school course that you take for granted, but it can only transform the lives of people through green energies and other methods as well. I know that Purdue will make me more of a responsible adult, and I will only continue to excel in education on to my path towards a fulfilling college career. I look forward to joining Purdue University and contributing my personality on campus and my diligent work effort in the classroom. Purdue is a wonderful school and I would be very grateful to be a part of the 2012 freshman class. I hope to achieve my top goals in life through Purdue University and their well respected degree in chemical engineering.

1. Is the essay good?(will it stand out from all of the others).
2. Is it organized properly?(does it flow smoothly as you read).
3. What else is needed in the essay or is not needed?
Please help with these points, thank you.

Yes, great stuff. The continuity... well, it could be better or worse. It is a strong essay...

In this situation, I want to see more brevity:
As I look Looking back into the past through my the kaleidoscope of my past, I see someone who...---hit hard, few words.

Ah, like this: This "kid" is me.----That is good brevity.

I now see something changing in my field of vision as the kaleidoscope turns, the chemistry is changing and I see the event that led to my deep interest of the ...

Now, as I am older, I realize that a University such as Purdue can harbor my interests because of its top of the line education in chemical engineering and its philosophy of excellence as well. This is fluff. Say exactly what you intend to accomplish.

Kill "THAT" any time you have the chance:
When I look back through my kaleidoscope, I realize that I have had ...

Purdue will also allow enable me to...----Just an idea.. not important.

Looking good... obviously you are one of the motivated, serious people. The essay needs more specificity, more short term goals. More substances, and less assertion. It is strong, but it can be stronger if you show that you are already reading about recent advancements, running to catch up... show that you are fired up, and fascinate the reader with your discussion of modern chemistry advancements.