PennState Personal Statement - ALICE IN WONDERLAND; My life is very similar

IN NEED OF HELP! I am writing my personal statement on how I am like Alice from Alice in Wonderland. This is the start but I have hit writers block and I NEED to finish the essay today! Am I going in the right direction? This is what I am trying to get across --> Like Alice I am curious and creative, I like to explore, and I do not agree with traditional teaching as it does not provide the ability to think outside the box. Alice's curiosity lead to to follow the rabbit and fall into Wonderland -- me following my dreams to Penn State. Wonderland = Penn State; large/diverse campus with plenty to explore. The problem I am having is fitting in the part about how my entire family graduate from Penn State, parents, cousins, aunts, uncles, etc. Any suggestions????

My intro so far:
My life is very similar to that of Alice's from Alice in Wonderland. By nature Alice is very curious, inquisitive, and creative. In Alice's world, nothing is black and white. Much like Alice I do not see the world as Math class where 1 + 1 = 2, but rather English class where there are millions of answers to one question. My whole life I have been curious, creative, and a big thinker

My life is very similar to that of Alice's from Alice in Wonderland. By nature Alice is very curious, inquisitive, and creative as she explores unknown places and encounters new adventures, as well as she learns from all these experiences. She also finds new ways to overcome her obstacles and strives to find the right direction of prosperity. . In Alice's world, nothing is black and white(what do you mean by the green sentence? Make it clear. It is important to make different aspects of the story apparent since you want to link it your life. ) . Much likesimilar to Alice I do not see the world as Math class where 1 + 1 = 2, but rather English class where there are millions of answers to one question. My whole life I have been curious, creative, and a big thinker.


Hope this helps
Ahmad

I think you are in the right direction. It would become a very attractive work in the end. I am sure that all members of this forum will enjoy reading this essay when you accomplishe it:))))))

Thank you so much! Do you think I should include anything about having a lot of alumni in my family or would that be cohesive with my statement?

I can't remember all parts of the Alic story, but if there is no connection between this fact (a lot of alumni...) and the story it may ruin the unity of the essay. If you could find a part of the story where talks about this fact that the atmosphere we grow in influences our behavior or goals, you can add this point to your work.

Ah! Yes there is! That helped a lot!!!!

I think this is a good introduction, but remember the body and introduction are linked and you should organize the body according to what you state in the introduction.


My suggestion :" In my world nothing is absolute, all objects, concepts, thoughts, and attitudes toward everything have a variety of meanings, just like the world of Alice. Briefly: I am ready to discover all aspects of the world"

It would be better to write about your interests and where you want to apply. You should mention that the place you are going to apply to is your Wonderland.