No, it's not bad!
The idea is great, how you wish to exceed, you sound very ambitious.
Okay, some of your sentences are informal. I think you should add some vocabulary words here and there.
Few months away,
(You mean "few months ago")
Though, I would like to make it clear that I am not here to simply follow my father's footsteps. I am here to prove a point and make a name for myself.
This sentence is informal. Don't directly state that you're trying to prove or state something. I thin you can even delete the part of how you do not want to follow your father's steps. That is unnecessary info.)
Do not directly state that you are trying to prove a point, you want to persuade people about your attributes without actually saying it.
Your essay, mentions attributes of yourself, but you do not relate how the university can fulfill that, the question is asking why you wish to attend this school. Try to connect characteristics from the school that can achieve your goals.
What is it from UCONN, that can fulfill your dreams?
The only thing you mention from the school is this
"CONN can offer me the advanced real world training that I would need to succeed as an accountant."
That's not enough.
In addition, do not always repeat that you did well, your ambitious, etc etc
Because you want to persuade them not show off.
It's a well-written first draft. You have very few grammatical errors, so that's good.
Well, GOOD LUCK!