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'panic, worry, disbelief, and terror' - my goals in becoming a nurse


simplymeilin 2 / 5  
Nov 26, 2011   #1
Hi :) Can you guys please give me feedback on my essay? Thanks in advance :)
UC Prompt 1.
"Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations."

Two and a half years ago, on a wintry, December day, I was lying down on my warm bed when my left hand subconsciously landed on my right breast, and at that moment I felt something hard. It was a lump.

Upon this unexpected discovery, an amalgamation of emotions consisting of panic, worry, disbelief, and terror flooded my insides. Fear of the unknown consumed my thoughts as I contemplated the possibility that I could have a malignant lump. When I confided in my mom about the incongruous, one-inch mass, she was mortified as well. Despite this, she became my shadow of support. With my mom by my side, I embarked on a passage that not only widened my understanding of empathy but also opened a door of opportunity that led me to seriously consider pursing a career as a nurse.

In the next months, I researched various types of lumps and possible treatments for each type until my eyes strained. I familiarized myself with the causes of cancerous cells, the formation of cysts and pseudolumps, the relation between the menstrual cycle and breast changes, and much more. To prepare myself for the diagnosis, I mentally projected potential scenarios: Would I undergo a biopsy? Would I need mammograms? Would I endure chemotherapy? I pondered over the possibility of each outcome until I drowned myself in a sea of worries. On the edge of despair, I divulged my worries to my mom, and her soothing words of encouragement scooped me up from the ditch that my thoughts plunged me into.

As I sat at the patient's waiting room, I saw patients with breast cancer, heart failure, and fractured bones but the compassionate hospital nurses continuously kept smiles stained on their faces. Reflexively, my cheek muscles inched up against gravity. I realized that support, no matter how small, could ease the mind and change a person's perspective throughout difficult times.

During my ultrasound, I was confronted with daunting information; instead of just one lump, I possessed seven: four in my right breast and three in my left. Tremors glided down my spine and my eyes grew vacant. I panicked, worrying that part of the lumps could break off and invade healthy tissues, a process I learned called metastasis. The floodgates of my emotions opened; tears flowed relentlessly down my cheeks. "We will get through this together," whispered the nurse, and with her support my thoughts stabilized as we rationalized my situation together. The nurse's display of empathy helped me relax and showed me that I, too, want to ease people's worries.

On June 19, 2009, I was diagnosed with fibroadenmo, a benign tumor composed of breast gland tissues. Relief swept over me as all my worries dissipated. I bounded out of the hospital, thankful of the immense support I received.

Looking back, I reflect how I was given the strength to persevere from that support I received from my mom and the nurses. Their compassion and empathy turned my horrifying experience into one that I can positively reflect on, inspiring me to pursue a career in nursing. I want to be there for people, to become their backbone. I want to be that foundation that people could rely on during their frailest and weakest moments. The path to aid others, analogous to how my mom and nurses helped me, is an opportunity that I have commenced and want to continue with passion.
shanicem13 2 / 4  
Nov 27, 2011   #2
I think this essay is great, you take a difficult situation and turn it positive for a career choice. I see no grammar or spelling errors and it's well structured.


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