Opportunity of a lifetime/ simply no other place ; Why NYU?

#1 I decided to choose the New York Campus because I want to study in a place where people love what they do. When I visited the NYU campus in February of 2012 I was beyond amazed by the energy that the students in New York demonstrated. I felt at home and that is something really important to me since I'm moving thousands of miles from my actual home. Being in New York for those few days woke up in me a desire to aspire for more in life and I decided that I was going to take this chance because is what I truly need. Studying in New York is the opportunity of a lifetime; I can't wait to study in a place that conveys so much history and to share it with new people that will teach me a new way of life.

#2 It was April 2nd to be exact, almost midnight, the line was endless; the cold was unbearable yet I couldn't leave. As I finally entered the 86th floor of the Empire State Building, the cold stopped and a sentiment that I have never felt before filled me. I finally found the place where I wanted to become the person I dream of being. Before me truly laid the city that represents dreams and new aspirations for everybody that walks though it's streets. All of my life I've been waiting for that moment in which everything made sense and it was not until this day I finally understood were I truly belonged. This is the reason why I chose the NYU campus; there is simply no place like New York.

The second one! It is much more descriptive and it shows that you really passionate about studying in New York City. The first one is good as well but it does not grab my attention.

Thank you :)

i think you have add something more unique to your responses, alot of people are writting about that. :(

thanks