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'one outrageous year together' - letter to futute roommate


kryskripp 3 / 4  
Jan 1, 2012   #1
Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you that will help your roommate know you better

Dear Roomie,
Well it looks like we will be embarking on one outrageous year together. I am so eager for us to create new memories together this coming year.

I am a night owl at heart. My favorite time of day is right at dusk, when the sky turns that perfect shade of midnight blue and the moon lies low over the horizon, treetops and houses silhouetted across the sky. While the rest of the house lies in quiet slumber, I may be folding clothes from the heaping mound on my floor, dusting my shelves of knickknacks, or reading snuggled beneath my blankets.

I am a simple girl. My idea of the perfect Saturday evening involves curling up on the couch in my pajamas watching reruns of my favorite crime shows, NCIS and Bones, or reading a novel that chronicles a teen's romantic and life woes. Everyone always seems to have that one hobby they absolutely love but never seem to be able to find the time to indulge. For me, this is reading. Nothing beats opening the pages of a book and immersing myself in a fictional world, escaping some of life's sometimes harsher realities. No matter how hard I may try, I always find myself skimming the end of the novel before I have finished the first chapter.

I love my crazy family more than anything. You will probably see a photo on my desk of me grudgingly smashed between my sister and cousin as they kiss my cheeks. I may jokingly call it abuse, but they just tell me it is sisterly and cousinly love, and I know they are right.

I cannot wait for us to finally meet!

I need to add more to the opening and concluding paragraphs so just skim over those. suggestions would be great!
22kcox 5 / 22  
Jan 1, 2012   #2
It jumped from the second to the third paragraphs everything else flowed. Maybe a better transition? just a thought! keep working sounds great!
OP kryskripp 3 / 4  
Jan 1, 2012   #3
thanks so much for the suggestions!!
RiceAllTheWhey 3 / 16  
Jan 1, 2012   #4
Beautiful writing in the first section, and the voice is correct for a letter to a roommate.
yuanyuan3045 6 / 23  
Jan 1, 2012   #5
Okay I think this is perfect, if we could be roommates we would get along great. I'm going to go read your other essay now.


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