I am applying to Ohio State. the prompt is Why did you choose to apply to Ohio State? What do you think about this? Here is my response:
My decision to apply to The Ohio State was one of unique circumstances. Reigning from Metro-Detroit, from the wee beginnings of my life, I have been an almost religious fan of the Wolverines. The walls of my room are maize and blue, and the iconic block "M" has dominated my existence. Despite all this, I was ready to apply to OSU.
All bias placed aside, I had to do only what was best for my future, and Ohio State is what is best. I plan to major in engineering for my undergraduate education, and I also plan on pursuing my graduate degree. I have chosen Ohio State University primarily because of the vast resources available for to undergraduate students for research. After getting in touch with the Peer Research Contact for the Electrical/Computer Engineering Department, I was even more impressed with the opportunities available. My dream is to build a computer that will change the world in a way so monumental, that people take it for granted, much as the way the Internet has become an integral part of American society. This computer would inevitably be smaller and faster than anything that has come before it, and would be an essential to everyday life. This computer could only be built through advancements in microelectronics, particularly solid state microelectronics, which have yet to become as efficient as traditional computer components. With this research already being conducted at the undergraduate level, I can begin presenting my ideas and conducting research immediately.
And so I, the die-hard Wolverines fan, am willing to become a Buckeye in pursuance of a dream, in hopes that it would soon become a reality.
Hi,
"I have chosen Ohio State University primarily because of the vast resources available for to undergraduate students for research." - That is written all over their website. Write about why YOU should get accepted? Don't brag. Include qualities about yourself that suit you to OSU.
"My dream is to build a computer that will change the world in a way so monumental, that people take it for granted , much as the way the Internet has become an integral part of American society."
'Take it for granted' is negative. Replace it.
Emphasize more on why you should get selected and how OSU is perfect for you. Talk about yourself.
Good Luck
My decision to apply to The Ohio State was one of unique circumstances.
The rest of this first paragraph does not really present any unique circumstances. It just says you were a Wolverines fan...
After getting in touch with the Peer Research Contact for the Electrical/Computer Engineering Department, I was even more impressed with the opportunities available. My dream is to build------- what opportunities are you talking about? For the rest of this paragraph, as you talk about your specific interests, also talk about some resources or professors at the school that will be perfect for your pursuing unique interests.
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