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We can know about ourselves more from animals just by watching them


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Jul 28, 2011   #1
As we getting more knowledge about human being, people start to be interested in understanding more about animals. I believe observing and studying animals can tell us a lot about human nature. I think we can understand ourselves from animals in two different approaches, direct and indirect.

From some scientific programs on television, which introduce animals' lives, I know more about natural habit we share with different species. For example, I watch television and learn the social structure of sliverback, a chimpanzee which has silver back. The sliverback maintain his power in the whole family by attacking and banishing mature male chimpanzees. That reminds me an ancient tyrant in China who murdered his brothers for mounting the throne. I realized directly human and animals sometimes are common in a cruel way.

In addition to cruel way, I had some experiences in more positive and indirect viewpoint. I was a volunteer in a school, where young criminal are sent after they are sentenced. The school designed a course, which is primitively about taking care of homeless animals, in order to help those kids get back to normal lives and teach them some virtue to live by. In the beginning, I was a little bit scary of interacting with those kids. However, not until the day did I find the warm sight reflecting from the eyes of a kid, while he washing and playing with a dog. Suddenly, I understand that those kids are just like you and me, though they did have made some mistakes. Again, I see the bright side of human nature from observing animals' interaction with people in a indirect way.

Observing animals can tell us a lot of information about human nature is for sure. For me, I learn a lot from observing animals. I see the dark side and the bright side both. So I agree with it.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jul 31, 2011   #2
As we get more knowledge about human beings, people start to be interested in...

I realized humans and animals sometimes have cruel characteristics in common.----Very interesting!! I fixed the grammar of the sentence... I think this is an astute observation!

No need for the comma:
I was a volunteer in a school where young criminal are sent after they are sentenced.

The school designed a course about taking care of homeless animals in order to help those kids get back to normal lives and teach them some virtue to live by.

In the beginning, I was a little bit scary of interacting with those kids.---Great sentence!

However, not until that day did I find the warm light reflecting from the eyes of a kid while he washing and playing with a dog.

Suddenly, I understood that those kids...

Observing animals can give us a lot of information about human nature, for sure.

:-)


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