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NYU - Academic interest - why i chose History?


ylee11 7 / 11  
Dec 28, 2010   #1
I'm majoring in History.
Give me any advices and i would appreciate it.

When I was a little girl, I used to sleep in my dad's arms, listening to Greek mythology in his voice. As I age, I enjoyed reading, especially history. I found myself quickly attached to the context of history. The impressionable girl was quickly assimilated to various worlds; I was thrilled at Alexander's victory and moaned by Caesar's fall. To me, history was an enormous fountain that I could not stop drinking. Though, I felt indefinable reluctance that the rise and fall of a dynasty could be described only in few pages. The grief and joy of ones before us were condensed but not fully explained. Curiosities to explore this mankind more in depth started to grow gradually.

At the end, I realized history was all about a reflection of individual - how he/she viewed the world. One could quickly ignore parts he thought were needless and focused on other parts. Yet, at the same time, it was a harsh true that most histories were written by stronger individuals. Stories were descended by the winners, honoring their conquests and lionizing their heroes. I found myself strongly intrigued by the histories that were overlooked: other accounts that might completely reverse the general understanding of the incident. I sometimes resented history that was wrong and completely biased. Whoever the winners were, history has a moral responsibility to provide genuine story for descendants. Hifco, the Historical Fallacy Committee that I joined since my sophomore year aided me to do so. More focused on specific history of Korea, this committee, with its separated department of promotion and execution, reviewed historical contexts of various literary resources and corrected any errors from contexts relating to Korean history. We also published our own version of Korean history resource for foreigners. Yet, not every process was successful. As a student, correcting historical fallacy did have limits; I realized I need more studies in this field to make my voice be considered; a thorough understanding of history completely would better prepare me how to respond specific historical errors. While working on this committee, I found more overlooked histories that are waiting for my attention. Also, I realized that understanding the entire chronicles of this world would be necessary to comprehend histories that are different, unique, and complete. NYU School is where I can achieve such comprehension. It has numerous institutions and resources to provide students a variety of perspectives. Moreover, its liberal culture in New York will aid to understand how the world had developed, centering one of the most historical cities.

History itself is dynamic and fluxional. Infinite possibilities of human behaviors were revealed as well as human's repeated flaws. It tells us that we are not completely independent from our past, as it is what has formed us. Exploring such subject thoroughly would be my long desire as a prospect scholar. I want to make my first start of history in NYU.
moorea 1 / 5  
Dec 28, 2010   #2
just a few suggestions:

change it to "fall asleep in my dad's arms"
change he/she to "he or she"
change it to "moaned at Caesar's fall"

i really love your final paragraph. it is concise and impactful.

great job, it is a great response to the prompt. i would REALLY appreciate if you could also critique my essay. thanks!


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