I have 1 brother and 1 sister older than me and 2 brothers and one sister younger than me.
Hi Suhaib, I just wanted to tell you this sentence gave me a cool experience. Good poetry always gives a cool experience. Use one and two instead of 1 and 2, though... it looks nicer and is more hypnotic! :-)
This is my lesson for you: Always do this one thing after you write an essay. Read what you have written, and find the unique lesson. There should be some unique concept or lesson that makes the essay worth writing. In this essay, you tell all about your interests and plans, but you should find a theme that is the unique lesson.
For example, the movie star wars has a theme about good always triumphing over evil. Your theme might be an idea that is important to you. What is the unique insight you would like to share, the insight that makes you want to live the kind of life you want to live? Try to write a perfect sentence that expresses your truth, and add that sentence to the first paragraph.
It is like giving your essay a vitamin. :-)