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"Moving cities was simple. Starting a new life was difficult." - Admissions


abrodrick 1 / 2  
Sep 23, 2011   #1
I am applying to Texas A&M and this essay is not required, but i figured i would write it anyways.

here is the prompt.

There may be personal information that you want considered as part of your admissions application. Write an essay describing that information. You might include exceptional hardships, challenges, or opportunities that have shaped or impacted your abilities or academic credentials, personal responsibilities, exceptional achievements or talents, educational goals, or ways in which you might contribute to an institution committed to creating a diverse learning environment.

Moving cities was simple. Starting a new life was difficult.

It was the summer of 2006 and my family was moving from Dallas to the small hill country town of Boerne. I had been to Boerne numerous times in the past, but I was eleven and I couldn't fully understand why we had to pack up and leave the place I called home for the past six years. My father was furthering his career as he entered his first year of being a practicing physician, and that require him to relocate.

Leaving my friends and the relationships I had created with people was harder than I had anticipated. When I attended my first year of school in Boerne I realized at my age people start forming groups of friends and are reluctant to welcoming newcomers. Joining various teams and clubs made it easier for me to find people who were willing to spend time with me and understand me. Throughout the years I have been associated with school sports teams, extracurricular activities, such as Disciple Now, National Honor Society, and 4-H, and I have volunteered for various community projects.

Adjusting to my new academic environment was a difficult task. Unlike my previous school, where there were less than twenty students per grade, I now had to deal with a class having more than 200 students. I now had four classes each day instead of the eight per day that I was accustomed to. Since I was not going to the same class each day I thought I would be able to become more relaxed with my homework. I was wrong. Learning to complete an assignment the day it was assigned was a difficult task for me, but I soon learned it was essential if I wanted to stay ahead. I realized by putting off work until the last minute, I was merely demonstrating half of my potential because I was rushed for time. Nowadays, I am able to manage my time when I get home, and I allow myself adequate time to study, without being exhausted the next day. This impacts me because I can stay attentive in class and be able to acquire new information.

Currently, I am involved in numerous activities so it is a necessity that I am capable of properly managing my time. The fall is a relaxing season for me because I am not currently in any activities and am able to focus on my schoolwork. As the school year progresses, my activities begin to pile on. The winter is a stressful time period for me due to the fact that I am on the school basketball team, and I participate in the annual county livestock show. During basketball season, we practice everyday from 2:45 to 5:30, and our games are every Tuesday and Friday. Also, during the spring I am involved with track, practicing for two hours each day and attending a meet every week. These activities leave me with little spare time during the school week. Many athletes run into problems with this because they do not know how to properly manage their time, and their grades are a consequence of this. However, I have maintained an A average because I know how important it is to have good grades if I want to go far in life.

Following graduation, I look forward to attending a four-year university. After studying hard and remaining focused, I plan to graduate with a degree in zoology. I aspire to follow in my father's career and apply to a medical school with the intention of becoming an ophthalmologist. Not only do I want to create a new family lineage of retina specialists, but also I want to be able to contribute to society by lending a hand to those in need. By being a heath care provider I will have a direct impact on people's lives.

Any additions/changes would be greatly appreciated. Please do no hold back when correcting it, as i desperately need to have an outstanding essay.

Thank you for taking time out of your day to help me. :)
Zeinab1383 5 / 43  
Sep 24, 2011   #2
that required him to relocate

forming groups of friends and are reluctant to welcoming him to relocate

Adjusting to my new academic environment was a difficult task

Challenge is not a better word instead of task?
OP abrodrick 1 / 2  
Sep 24, 2011   #3
oh, i guess that would be better. i wasnt sure.

also, im not sure what you were trying to correct in the second thing you put.
Zeinab1383 5 / 43  
Sep 25, 2011   #4
I wanted to say this!!!!

at my age people start forming groups of friends and are reluctant to welcoming newcomers
OP abrodrick 1 / 2  
Sep 26, 2011   #5
you dont have to get mad...


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