Say it in fewer words when you can:
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The first person that comes to mind when I think about who has significantly impacted my life is my mother.
You are using although incorrectly:
It took me a while to figure that out, but her extraordinary influence has changed my life in many ways. The reason why it took me a while was this: as I was growing up I began to value
_________ (what things?), and my new perspective enabled me to appreciate my mother's wisdom.
in life and then it got to me that my mother had a big influence on my life.
The moment I perceived that I was listening attentively and helping people out in many ways, and taking responsibility for things, I realized that I was following the example of my mother. Among the many great
she posses, her unique characteristics, perseverance, and
sense of responsibility
have made me what I am today, a hard working person.
The characteristics of my mother
is none of what
are different from any that I
have seen in other people. She is my role model. Here quick instinct that something needs to be done if there is a problem; her skills as
a homemaker, and her quick decision-making abilities are a few among many of her greatest qualities
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One day while my mom was ....
Some of your sentences are quite powerful! You need to practice changing words from singular to plural. Good luck!!! I think your mother will feel good when she sees this essay.