I'm planning on majoring in International Relations. I'm also applying to Columbia Early Decision
As the Secretary of the Model United Nations Club of Commonwealth High School, I attained substantial knowledge about countries' histories, their policies and how they are organized. By recreating and analyzing global diplomatic situations, I got a taste of the world of international relations and diplomacy. My experience in the Model United Nations Club showed me that dialogue can play a significant role in the development and protection of any country. As an American citizen living in Puerto Rico, I feel both a part of the U.S. and apart from the U.S., which has made me sensitive to the cultural differences between Latin America and the U.S. By applying what I have learned in this club and expanding my knowledge of foreign policy through coursework at college, I hope to ultimately be a leader in fostering better cultural understanding between the countries of our Hemisphere through government service.
I'm from PR, by the way :)
This is a good short answer piece. It is precise and hits on different aspects of what you like to do as a student. I don't see any grammatical mistakes nor punctuation errors. Good work! ^^
This is interesting. I'm an officer of my school MUN club in India, and I'm an American citizen. Similar situation. My problem with this is that I can substitute places and names and submit it as MY essay, and it would work just as well (and no, I am NOT gonna do that:P). It isn't personal enough, I think. It describes a situation but doesn't REALLY explore the deeper impact of the situation on you, which I think will make the difference.
But then again, that's just a feeling in the back of my head. It's a good essay, quite telling of the kind of person you are.
One another note, if you do MUN and want to do IR, wouldn't you want to write more about MUN? I'd write about another extracurricular, and save the MUN for supplement essays, so you don't overuse it but you use it to its full potential.
Hope this helped!
The writing is fluent but I want to remind you that many students will use MUN topic as short answer for common app. The words you use is too vapid. So if you decide to use this topic, I suggest you to use humorous languages or something interesting conferences in your MUN experience.
Good luck. Columbia is my dream school.
Shuang .
many people write mun but every perspective is different. I am also an MUN'er and i think that the puerto rico-us-international relationship that you draw out is good.
"As an American citizen living in Puerto Rico, I feel both a part of the U.S. and apart from the U.S., which has made me sensitive to the cultural differences between Latin America and the U.S."
liked it.
maybe you could personalize it a little bit more with this kind of insights
overall i like the narration.
