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MIT: What personality attribute are you most proud of?


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So here's the topic:
What attribute of your personality are you most proud of, and how has it impacted your life so far? This could be your creativity, effective leadership, sense of humor, integrity, or anything else you'd like to tell us about. (200-250 words)

What I'm thinking is that almost everyone is going to have the same sort of essay about their integrity, leadership, etc., and since MIT stresses uniqueness on their application, I thought I'd focus on my sense of humor.

Though I am proud of many aspects of my personality, a key to many of my successes has been my sense of humor. Often subtle and always optimistic, I have found it to be a very beneficial element in relieving stress and assisting in communication and collaboration with my peers, while not taking away from the focus or hard work required in a given situation.
In my activities, athletics and schoolwork, I frequently find myself in stressful situations, many in the form of leadership roles. I have discovered that in order to manage these strenuous situations and attain success as an individual and a group, my sense of humor has played a key role. In Science Olympiad, for example, our projects rarely work according to plan from the beginning. To overcome the added challenges that occur and prevent them from stymying our progress, I often lighten the mood of my teammates and myself subtly through humor. This encourages the growth of new ideas and solutions as we work toward our collective goals.
Additionally, I have found my sense of humor beneficial in creating stronger relationships between my teammates, classmates and myself. These relationships are what have facilitated many of our collective successes, fostering communication and collaboration on ideas and solutions. Without the appropriate sense of humor, this cooperation toward our ultimate goals and our success, overall, would have been greatly limited. A result, my sense of humor is the aspect of my personality that I am most proud of.

Oct 28, 2012, 08:45pm   #3
Hey, are you applying EA to MIT?

Well overall, I think it's pretty good. I like that you chose to be unique and pick humor; however, I believe with something like this I kinda wanna hear a joke! You know? It's just a suggestion (and probably somewhat risky), but I think demonstrating your humor will really help this stand out.

Also, at times it seems a little repetitive.
Oct 28, 2012, 09:09pm   #5
Well it seems like everything before your SO example is basically saying the same thing. Maybe shorten it a bit and get straight to an example?

aarkebauer:
Often subtle and always optimistic, I have found it to be a very beneficial element in relieving stress and assisting in communication and collaboration with my peers, while not taking away from the focus or hard work required in a given situation.


and

aarkebauer:
In my activities, athletics and schoolwork, I frequently find myself in stressful situations, many in the form of leadership roles. I have discovered that in order to manage these strenuous situations and attain success as an individual and a group, my sense of humor has played a key role.


Maybe just me, but that sounds almost like the same thing? (I think it's just the "to relieve stress" too many times)

PS-Could you take a look at my essay?
I really like the idea behind your essay! However, I agree it can sound a little redundant within your sentences and also within the entire essay. I would thesaurus the tar out of this essay (stress, humor, -- maybe alleviate instead of relieve?).
aarkebauer:
Additionally, I have found my sense of humor beneficial in creating stronger relationships between my teammates, classmates and myself
Also, can you have a relationship with yourself? ;) I understand what you're trying to say it just seems unnecessary to add that part. A few sentences seem run-on or comma happy. I'd try experimenting with semi-colons and rephrasing in a more active voice to cut down on words. I had to do the same thing with my essay...

Best of luck!

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