I have stumbled across many special people in my life. For the most part, my parents particularly special and significant,
^This is unnecessary.
Without him life would not be the same.
^Not necessary
His ethics and values taught me how to be a person and a lady, everyday from school he always asks me; "what homework I have," "how was my day," "how was school," and keep me on my toes.
^For some reason I think that this is normal for a gaurdian.
I read the rest of your essay and it doesn't appeal to me. It sounds like your uncles influence on you is average. If this is true, I recommend that you do not write your essay about him. If this is false, you should emphasize your uncles influence on you with something other than empty statements. Almost all of the sentences in your essay are empty.