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'we live in a very unpredictable world' - the world u come from-MIT essay 250 words


arceus 1 / 1  
Dec 26, 2011   #1
The exciting world from where I come might be a tiny dot for many on the city map, but for me it is the greatest source of inspiration-P.S.B.B Sr. Secondary School. This is the place where I learnt a lesson, a lesson which was never included in any textbook known to me, a lesson called "Life".

The school helped me realize that we live in a very unpredictable world, where statistics cannot determine everything in our life. It helped me broaden my perspective by exposing me to a world filled with opportunities. Among the various opportunities that the school provided, the most exciting experience was to represent my school in international competitions. They were not just competitions; they can also be defined as a platform for social and cultural exchange. The school has instilled in me discipline and perseverance, a heightened awareness of the world and a faultless sense of life. It has given me the strength and endurance to keep pushing my limits and expanding my horizon every moment. Here I was able to understand that we must try to identify ourselves as a part of humanity and must dissolve the differences of any forms that separate us inorder to achieve our goals of human development.

PSBB will always be close to my heart, as it has not only shaped my aspirations but also defined me as someone who is unafraid to face challenges that life puts forward. The beauty of such learning is that it will stay with me forever. PSBB is a constant source of inspiration for me to learn and keep learning.
thes1tuation 3 / 4  
Dec 26, 2011   #2
I like the essay, however, what exactly is the international competition you mention? I feel it is too ambiguous and your essay could be strengthened if the reader knew what they were.
emrebond007 4 / 7  
Dec 26, 2011   #3
i did a good job writing that essay but on my opinion,it seems like you are more focused on the influence of the school on you than the true description of the school.i think you should describe a little bit more the things that influenced you.
silentspring 12 / 58  
Dec 26, 2011   #4
I agree. I looked at the MIT admission advice. It says that you should tell a story and then describe that influence. There is a sample essay and tips for applying to MIT on MIT's website. Go check that out!

Hope this helps.
deremifri 9 / 137  
Dec 26, 2011   #5
It at times sounds like you are just listing adjectives that make you look like a good and intelligent person that is very concerned about

the important topics. And why is that? Because you are just general. Try to tell one story and explain how that shaped one of your character traits.

By the way, I have an MIT Challenge essay, would be really great if someone checked it out.


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