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Lessons gathered from an ongoing life experience+diabetes- admission essays


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Nov 1, 2008   #1
FSU: For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.

For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires represents strengths of all sorts, whether it be moral, physical, or intellectual. For myself, my life is greatly reflected within Vires. Artes refers to one's intellectual pursuits as demonstrated in art, skill, or craft. Mores refers to an individual's character, custom or tradition. Vires is the word that can be reflected most in my life due to my strength to overcome diabetes.

Diabetes is a disease in which a person's pancreas ceases to work, disallowing the creation of insulin needed to break food down into necessary sugars for a body to function. I was diagnosed with this disease in the third grade, when I was eight years old. When I was diagnosed, my doctor spoke to me about my inability to participate in some activities, such as contact sports. As much as my doctors and other people say I cannot do, I do not try to let it stop me. I have played hockey, a contact sport not approved of by my doctors, for many years. My doctors say I'm a very strong willed person, to not let it stop me. This disease shows my strength by enabling myself to see that just because a person is diagnosed with a deadly illness, whether it be cancer or diabetes, you cannot let anything stop you from achieving the things you love to do and know you can do. Although my strengths can be shown with my struggle with diabetes, my greatest weakness is also revealed: the fact that I have to rely on other people to stay alive. My family members have saved my life at home multiple times, and I would not be around without them. My physical strength is very important; keeping my body and mind in shape helps me not only overcome diabetes, but helps me keep a stronger, healthier lifestyle for the rest of my life. This disease, my life, and my strength to overcome it has shaped me into a person that does not let anything come in the way of what I wish to do with my life in college. My determination throughout school is driven by the fact that I understand that one day I could not be here anymore, and I must live each day like it is my last. This has fueled my determination to attempt to be the best student I will be, and will drastically push myself forward through my college years.

UF: Describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your family, your school or community activities, or your involvement in areas outside of school.

Within the college experience, students must rely on knowledge and guidance gained from experiences, some life changing some not. Some individuals deal with prejudice, some antisocialism. I, however, deal with a disease that has not only changed my outlook on life, but also my determination throughout my years as a student. These lessons gathered from an ongoing life experience will assist me in my college years.

Diabetes is a disease in which a person's pancreas ceases to work, disallowing the creation of insulin needed to break food down into necessary sugars for a body to function. I was diagnosed with this disease in the third grade, when I was eight years old. When I was diagnosed, my doctor spoke to me about my inability to participate in some activities, such as contact sports. As much as my doctors and other people say I cannot do, I do not try to let it stop me. I have played hockey, a contact sport not approved of by my doctors, for many years. My doctors say I'm a very strong willed person, to not let it stop me. The first way this disease has affected my outlook on life is by enabling myself to see that just because a person is diagnosed with a deadly illness, whether it be cancer or diabetes, you cannot let anything stop you from achieving the things you love to do and know you can do. Another way that diabetes has changed my outlook on life is showing me my greatest weakness, and possibly the weakness of many others: the fact that I have to rely on other people to stay alive. My family members have saved my life at home multiple times, and I would not be around without them. This disease, my life, has shaped me into a person that does not let anything come in the way of what I wish to do with my life in college. My determination throughout school is driven by the fact that I understand that one day I could not be here anymore, and I must live each day like it is my last. This has fueled my determination to attempt to be the best student I will be, and will drastically push myself forward through my college years.

Through an individual's life, knowledge and guidance is gained from experiences, some that are life changing. These life lessons are applied many times throughout the individual's lifespan. This holds true through the college experience. For myself, my life changing experience is my acquisition of diabetes, a disease in which a person's pancreas ceases to work, disallowing the creation of insulin needed to break food down into necessary sugars for a body to function. Having this disease has not only changed my outlook on life, but also my determination in school as a student. The lessons I have so far gathered in life will further assist me in my college years to be as successful of a student as possible.

I'm not sure if conclusions are even needed in the essays, but for myself, it seems as though diabetes is a very easy topic for me to speak about, and I can draw much from my life into these two prompts. I appreciate and feedback. Thanks!
EF_Team5 - / 1,586  
Nov 1, 2008   #2
A very nice response to the piece; your tone is confident and strong. Good job.

"Within the college experience, students must rely on knowledge and guidance gained from experiences; some life changing, some not. Some individuals deal with prejudice, some antisocialism. I, however, deal with a disease that has not only changed my outlook on life, but also my determination throughout my years as a student. These lessons gathered from an ongoing life experience will assist me in my college years.

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