Korean universities, culture, and technology. My passion to continue my study.

My name is Tian Lee. I have no sibling and come from broken home family. When I was born in 1991, I live with my both parent at rent house, because at that time we are in poor condition. But in 1993 they are separated and I don't know why the exact reason until now. Since then I only live with my mother and my aunt after moved to official residence at another sub district because we don't have enough money to buy a house. At that time, my mother was a civil officer teacher with a very low salary and taught at elementary school and my father was a laborer, he often work related to fisheries.

At the age of 5 years old, precisely in 1996, I went to my first formal education, PUI Kindergarten. At that time, I was smart student and proper to continued to elementary school, so I just spent only one year at kindergarten. At the next year I continued my study at Elementary School (SDN Saripin) with only 2 years, because my mother took installment to buy a small house at another sub district and at 3rd grade my elementary school's name was changed to SDN Setiamulya II and finished it until my 6th grade there. Since we moved in 1999, my mom was remarried and my aunt took a rent house far from where we lived. My experience and achievement since kindergarten is drawing competition. At elementary school, I was the 1st and the general winner of drawing and painting competition for elementary level at 4th grade and the 2nd winner singing (Pupuh) contest at 5th grade.

In 1998, I was enrolled a boarding school at Singaparna, a region far from where we lived. Because my step-father's fierce character which is probably giving bad impact on me that being in a phase of self-development, that's why I was sent there. At boarding school, I lived in girl's boarding. There are vary of activities, characters, traits, treatments, I had experienced from many girls in a boarding school. At my boarding school, we had 3 reports record, junior high school, boarding school and self report record. My achievement at junior high school is not many, I just got the 3rd winner of Arabic speech, the 2nd winner writing of scientific papers together with my classmates and also at Scrabble competition game I was the 1st and the general winner. All the competition was held inside the boarding. My boarding school extracurricular has not as many as public school. I just joined Pencak Silat (a kind of Sundanese martial arts) and scout which is a must to join. My academic record was not really good then, I was just in the 9th-12th position. I had busy schedule which are compulsory there, the learning schedule is from 7.00 a.m. to 3 p.m., I speak different language every week (English and Arabic), every Monday and Thursday night I attended a public speaking with 3 languages speech (Indonesian, English and Arabic) weekly in turns. Every Friday morning I had a sport and cleaning a whole boarding schedule, because at Friday is holiday, and before our bedtime I had a vocabulary class around 30 minutes. It was quite tiring schedule which is made an impact for my academic record, but I was very comfortable stay there.

Because the expense of my private junior high school is quite expensive, my mother told me to move to public school to continue my senior high school. During high school, I had a lot of experiences that affect my life. I joined several extracurricular such as Taekwondo, Student council, Pattrix (vocal class), Choir and Scouts. From these organizations I learned a lot about leadership, teamwork, togetherness, solidarity, self-confidence and other lessons, and what I like the most is mutual interaction between people who have different traits and characteristics. Since then, I became increasingly interested in researching a wide range of human personality. There, I can compared and understand my own characters and traits. I can change the piecemeal of my traits to be better. My achievement at high school was only the 3rd winner of Taekwondo championship (Heavy Class Female) inter-region at my second grade.

After completing high school, I had a lot of interest, and I believe I can be in the field that I want. I want to get in the department of medicines, psychology, communication, music and international relations. But some of them out of town and cost a lot of money. My mother may be included in the category of medium in economic terms since then, but she did not just think of me alone. He also helped her brothers and sister economic problems sometimes. So I had no other choice not to follow my wishes. Then one time I tried to register the communication department and have been accepted at a university outside of town. At that moment my mother did not approve of the university entrance with the reason I was the only child. So I was asked to enroll at the nearby university inside of town. So I ended up at the department of education -because at the university where I learned not too much choices- majoring in English. When entering my college, I do not join many extracurricular, I joined Siliwangi University Choir and Daya Mahasiswa Sunda (DAMAS) out of university and also I don't have any achievement. Because, since my college entrance I lived with my grandfather's sister the one who was keep after my mother and the one of my mother's brother family. I helped my mother's sister-in-law to keep after the grandmother. So, I just focus on my study and grandmother. During at college I had ever taught English Language at one of the popular Senior High School namely SMA N 5 as a training teacher in 2012 for 3 months.

Soon after graduated from college, I told my mother that I wanted to go and stay out of town since I grew up. Then, I wandered to Batam to become a nanny for 5 months. I just want to try something new and give me a challenge. And after that I stayed at Jakarta with my mother's big sister to look for another job. Till now, I am a private Indonesian (BIPA) and English teacher.

Look into the state of education in Indonesia, some of the schools that I know, students do not get proper counseling, they tend get some counseling about their future schools and to be promoted to high school and university course. Whereas psychologically, they less noticed by some teachers in their schools. Even some of them are less attention at home, so it makes some students tend to be quiet or even rebel and do not think about their future. I want to help students lead their future and lead them to the best of their education. I hope to be the one of the future leader and teacher that can change alteration and giving good impact for people.

My passion to continue my study is eager and moreover at Korea. I learn a lot the cultures, characteristics, music, technologies, even the languages from every dramas, movies, books, also sometimes with the Korean people who live in Indonesia. Some of Korean universities attracted my attention to continue my study there. This scholarship program really gives me an opportunity to pursue my master's degree at my desire university. I do really hope that I can be accepted in X University, because the university is very good to me to continue my study, with big expectations I become useful person to everyone, making proud of my family, to X University itself, Korea and Indonesia for sure and also further for the world. May God answer prayer and my request, I am optimistic that I can grab it.

When I was born in 1991, and I lived with my both parents at rented house, because at that time we are were in a poor financial condition.

You should practice to use the correct verb tense. It's easy to go online and find strategies for practicing correct verb tense. This sentence should be in the past tense:

But in 1993 they are were separated and I don't didn't know why the exact reason until now. --- Do you mean to say that you still do not know the reason? You can write:

...separated, and I never learned the reason for their separation.

Again, use the past tense:
Since then I only live lived with my mother...

Don't use more words than you need to use. Don't give the reader information s/he doesn't need:
At the age of 5 years old, precisely in 1996, At the age of five, I went ...

My experiences s and of achievement since kindergarten have come from drawing competitions .

Too many words again here:
Because the expense of my private junior high school is was quite expensive, my mother told me ...

My passion to continue my study is eager and moreover at Korea. ----I don't know what this sentence is supposed to mean. Try to clarify it.

I think your essay is too long. Do the instructions tell you to make it so long? If it's okay to shorten it, you should review it and take note of how many different things you are telling the reader. Make a list of every fact you tell the reader. Then, decide which ones are important and which are not.

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