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Dec 23, 2009, 08:46pm   #1
Johns Hopkins offers 50 majors across the schools of Arts and Sciences and Engineering. On this supplement, we ask you to identify one or two that you might like to pursue here. Why did you choose the way you did? If you are undecided, why didn't you choose? (If any past courses or academic experiences influenced your decision, you may include them in your essay.)

in bold is the sentence which i find to be very confusing personally...revisions? Thank you!

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Hi, Sadhvi, from your first paragraph, I got a very strong hunch that you are going to pursue a major related to biochemistry. So I was quite suppressed to read that you were undecided on your major yet. I suggest that you can keep your first para but make it that your interest have been changing over the years (eg. doctor, chemist, lab attendant, bioengineer, writer, mathematician).

All the best!
Dec 23, 2009, 10:25pm   #3
hmmm ok...well do you think i should just change it all together to biochemistry and link it to my research?
Dec 23, 2009, 11:30pm   #4
At age six, I knew I wanted to become a doctor. At age nine, I longed for an elite education. At age twelve, I knew I wanted to major in biochemistry—or at least I thought. At age fifteen, I knew I would distinguish myself in the faces of my peers through research in biochemistry, and my thirst for knowledge developed at the Mississippi School for Mathematics and Science, as I discovered other areas of study that challenged my curious mind. At age sixteen, I could analyze DNA fragments and run a Tolens' test, as my mind explored the realms of research. At age seventeen, I found pleasure in completing a difficult physics problem involving Newton's Second Law, as well as reading Nathanial Hawthorne's work and analyzing his true intent, and solving for the derivative of an equation had become a natural talent.

Now that I'm rereading it, I realized your passions and interests are very science-oriented, especially biochemistry. If I were the admissions officer (if only! then I can accept myself haha), I'd be surprised at why you choose to not declare a major. Maybe if you're not sure about biochemistry being something you want to dedicate a life-long career to, perhaps you can still mention that you want to pursue something in the field of science.

Hopefully this helped!
Dec 23, 2009, 11:52pm   #5
hmmm i agree...do you guy think that i can just switch the essay to say how i want to be a biochemistry major and link it to research? that way it will be more consistent??? and lets see...you dont have to declare a major until sophomore year anyways...so i can use that right?
Dec 24, 2009, 08:40pm   #8
Revisions!!! Please and Thank you!!! All of your support is so great...it really helped me!



At age six, I knew I wanted to become a doctor. At age nine, I longed for an elite education. At age twelve, I knew I wanted to major in biochemistry. At age fifteen, my thirst for knowledge developed at the Mississippi School for Mathematics and Science, as I discovered other areas of study that challenged my curious mind. I found pleasure in completing a difficult physics problem involving Newton's Second Law, as well as reading Nathanial Hawthorne's work and analyzing his true intent. At age sixteen, I could analyze DNA fragments and run a Tolens' test, as my mind ...

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Dec 24, 2009, 08:48pm   #9
it very clearly shows your interest and passion, but you may want to illustrate WHY you have so interested in biochemistry. just a thought. but overall i thought it was good...and it will work!
Dec 25, 2009, 11:01am   #11
yeah i guess like telling a story...not stating like facts, but showing why you have this passion through words...it will make your writing more interesting
Dec 25, 2009, 04:49pm   #12
Try This!!! Please and Thank you! hmmm I want to better fit my first paragraph into the essay...but i dont know if i am or if i'm not. please let me know. thanks!


At age six, I knew I wanted to become a doctor. At age nine, I longed for an elite education. At age twelve, I knew I wanted to major in biochemistry. At age fifteen, I found pleasure in completing a difficult physics problem involving Newton's Second Law, as well as reading Nathanial Hawthorne's work and analyzing his true intent. At age sixteen, I could analyze DNA fragments and run a Tolens' test, as my mind explored the realms of research. At age seventeen, I researched Metabolic Syndrome in order to obtain a better understanding of the molecular events that contribute to mitochondrial dysfunction during the onset of Metabolic Syndrome.
I plopped onto the stool at my lab, scanning an article about Aconitase, an enzyme in the TCA Cycle. The timid purr of the centrifuge clung in the air, and the warm, bitter smell of mice cells drenched in Tris-buffered saline hovered out of the cell culture room. After reading about Aconitase, I verified preliminary data which showed Angiotensin II, a hormone, levels had elevated. My timer went off fifteen minutes later and I pulled the sleeve of a purple latex glove over my bony hands. I shuffled through the boxes of new flasks and test tubes as I made my way to the centrifuge. I opened the heavy lid, and singled out each sample and found my cells, which had been treated with Angiotensin II, had turned into white, glue-like clumps. I added lysis-buffer to each sample, placed each in ice, and strolled towards the other lab. My mentor waited for me with a syringe and my control, and I lured each sample into a vertical gel. The next day I analyzed the gel and found that Aconitase levels had been affected, implying that ATP production during the TCA cycle had been affect as well. I illustrated my findings to my mentor, and we linked my analysis to why people who had Metabolic Syndrome were at risk for heart disease.
Through biochemistry I was able to channel my interests in science, while engaging in research that directly impacted society. Researching biochemical processes allowed me link diseases and disorders of today to molecular processes that have been known for centuries; thus, I have invested myself as a scholar and student of the science world.
Johns Hopkins promotes scholarly growth through the exploration of interests. My interest lies within the field of biochemistry, and I desire to explore this interest further through applied research and classroom learning. I will be the first from my family to pursue a career in the medical field. Krieger School of Arts and Sciences will allow me to further my knowledge and expertise in biochemistry, while I engage in a subject which interests me. This flexibility, provided by Johns Hopkins, will provide me with the elite education I desired at age nine, while I continue on the path of accomplishing the goal I set for myself at age six.
Dec 26, 2009, 04:38pm   #13
that isn't really what i meant...try focusing more on your emotions and feelings rather than the process and steps of procedure. rather than documenting events, write about how you felt that would show them that you love biochemistry. do you get it now?



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