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My interest in Bio- short essay


maXimumeXposure 3 / 8  
Jan 8, 2010   #1
BU Supplement short essay

My reported Major is Biology

Discuss, in brief, your interest in your intended major. How has this subject affected your life?


Age: ten
Location: Playground
She was ready to attack me; attack me with her words. After a long forboady silence, she finally spoke-
"BOYS SUCK"
The first blow in the horrid battle of girls versus boys. I quickly recovered. I spoke confidently,
"Uhh...really? Why do you say that?"
Feeling it wasn't strong enough, I added aggressively- "Huh?"
"Being a boy is the worst thing that could happen to you. If you're a boy, you have to be in horrible, horrible pain."

"What do you mean?" I questioned. Afraid my curiousity was out there, I quickly zipped my pants up.
"When you're older..."
dramatic silence
"You'll be in horrible pain..."
even more dramatic silence
"Every-single-month..."
alright, now its getting melodramatic
"Right after you shave, and put on aftershave!"
I was stunned. I was defenseless. I scanned my mind for something to use against her- What could I tell her that proves being a girl is worse? Nothing, I had nothing.

I came home and attended to my battle wounds. When I felt better, I ransacked my house, looking for evidence. Could there be something more painful than aftershave, that haunts girls every single month?

I found nothing. But wait, what's that?
Naah, just silly looking napkins. No luck.
And that? That book over there? Could it have something? I opened the book to an arbitiririy page. Nothing, just plants. I flipped to another page...and I found exactly what I was looking for.

The Biology book and the answer it carried led me to a world of wonders. I read, amused, amazed and slightly sickened. I have been very very interested in Biology since then. No, let me rephrase- I fell in love with Biology. I'll say it again-

I-Love-Biology, period.
demuredelight 2 / 22  
Jan 9, 2010   #2
Hey Tulip,
To be honest, this essay is much more serious than your short essay on "Grils, girls, girls" since you have been interested in biology since ten. It made me laugh when the girl says shaving is a monthly pain for boys. But I think your interest in female physiology will be insufficient to construct your passion for biology. I was a biology student, too. I took molecular, ecological and physiological biology courses. Biology is the real pain of mine. Not kidding. Your short answer does not show that you are prepared for such a demanding major.
Moonshadow0302 - / 68  
Jan 9, 2010   #3
Do all your essays begin and end with girls? I thought you said that other essay about extracurricular activities was a one-off and that the other essays were serious? I seriously doubt these kind of essays would help get you into a serious course. Remember universities are not looking to add to their male pool, they are looking for serious students who really want to study. You say you love biology - why? Just because some girl said that shaving is a boy's worst nightmare? How have you proved your love of biology? How has your love of biology affected your life? Answer the prompt - stop obsessing about girls!!
ktcat4002 2 / 8  
Jan 9, 2010   #4
All of your essays seem to revolve around girls. Is this the only reason you love biology? Give some different answers, perhaps.
Kenny Z 7 / 2  
Jan 9, 2010   #5
Well, i don't really consider this as a short essay to be honest. It's more concerned about other things rather than your interest in Bio.
OP maXimumeXposure 3 / 8  
Jan 10, 2010   #6
thank you all for the help.
Moonshadow, I will post my serious killer-essays very soon.

Hope you all can check them out!
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jan 16, 2010   #7
Afraid my curiosity was out there, I quickly zipped my pants up.

I don't get this part.

Hey, you have potential for something really great here! I think you are making a funny point about biology and menstruation. You wrote, "Every month..." And the last word of the essay is "period." This is very clever. If I understand correctly the effect you are trying to have, it is great! But make it clearer for the reader. Add a sentence to make it clear.


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