my essay applies to two topics and some of the schools im applying to require b and the other ones require c so i might as well kill two birds with one stone eh?
--> I am pretty sure that is a bad idea. You should stick with ONE!
to sending pictures to family down the streets.
--> I dont think this example really fits in. I mean if the family lives down the street, sending pictures through the internet to them is not exactly, amazing...
- I feel like the first paragraph, isnt really hookin' me. You just state things that are all true, and no one can really form an opinion to interact with the essay...
- I dont see how the second and third paragraph benefits your essay. It's all just information.
-I think you approached the first prompt to describe the influence on your generation, or some other broad community like the world as a whole. Am I right? I say this because, I feel like you dont really show HOW the internet has really benefited your group. You talk about how it would benefit the IPS...
You really need to write about one prompt!
I think more people would be able to give you feedback...because your can't combine prompts in the first place. I really hope I'm right.
Can someone clarify?!
GOOD LUCK : )