A golden ray of hope, it can change the world. I believe that everyone, whether it's a child, a parent, a teacher, a leader, a worker or a student, needs hope to motivate them. The presence of hope matters to me because it is a powerful substance, one which everyone requires to continue their lives meaningfully. It matters to me that I attempt to always be optimistic and instil hope into anyone and everyone. When my family got into a car accident, I tried my best to remain cheerful so as to raise everybody's spirits, especially those of my two sisters.
I find that through hope, everyone has a sense of purpose, a goal which they can work forward to. Did you know that there is even a small part in our brain just for hope?
A person might not move at a relentless pace to achieve their heart's desire, but it seems important that they move. Slow and steady, with a destination and hope to guide them, but move nevertheless. Many of the biggest inventions and discoveries were made when a person had hope and a will. The discovery of radium and the invention of the telephone hold this true. It is necessary that no one depends solely on a stroke of luck to get things done or become complacent once achieving a victory. Everybody needs hope to be the driving point of their lives to constantly accelerate them ahead. Then, the lives they lead and the contributions they make to society will become more significant. So, make that small part of your brain as big, as strong, as active and as everlasting as possible.
A golden ray of hope is that which shapes the world.
This is a nice essay and its cool that you ended with the same sentence as the first one but maybe you can try to connect it back with your conclusion. Like, therefore I believe that golden ray of hope is what shape the world because of it give everyone a sense of purpose in life.
Something like that.. I hope that helps and your essay is very convincing good job!
Umm best of luck to you and your acceptances in college.
Thnks Christine. Thts a good suggestion, but I've already mentioned that point several times in the essay itself, so it would get a bit redundant. Any ideas on how else to improve the conclusion?
