Okay... the music has to create an experience every moment. You can't include any sentences without substance:
My career goals are to be happy and excited about the work I am doing as well as enjoying to go to my job every day.
too obvious, everyone wants that.
My prior full-time work experience was in an office as an Administrative Assistant.
Boring sentence, room for improvement.
All that sentence above does is inform them of your recent job. Do it in this next sentence:
I have been employed as a dedicated, hard working administrative assistant, and I thought it was an okay job, but I did not have
passion for it and it did not challenge me. I was laid off due to
the economy and
the company downsizing, but I see...
I have an infatuation for music. ---in the kind of music called writing, there is a rule of thumb: show, don't tell. Show, by telling about an event or some thing...mention something weirdly intriguing...
I have an infatuation for music.
My infatuation with music has actually cost me some friendships.
I enjoy going to concerts and listening to music.
Talk more about audacity and the projects you have completed; talk about it seriously, not just "playing around," because that is good experience you are getting with audacity. It is impressive that you are already involved in the work you want to go to school to do. Not everyone can say that.
Write one paragraph of this essay as though it is intended to convince your friend to become a recording & artist; tell all about the great aspects of this art form.
Sorry I called some of it boring! Never be boring, always clever.