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'My hard work, leadership, and dedication' - circumstance, obstacle, conflict essay


cadet4966 1 / -  
Nov 24, 2013   #1
Describe a circumstance, obstacle or conflict in your life, and the skills and resources you used to resolve it. Did it change you? If so, how?

In my path to become a good leader, lead me to some obstacles.
It begins at my sophomore year. I was given the position of Detachment Assistant of my High School a fair start. Because of The actual commander lack of attendance, I have given the opportunity to rise. All emotions go thru my brain and I was excited, happy but also nervous. Determined to do my best, I collected information of all events, deadlines and dates at our main satellite school, Central High. Then a week later I took control of the meetings and successfully accomplish tasks that my superior couldn't do.

Despite requesting to give the role to someone else he was to remain the Detachment Liaisons until the end of the year and I was given my former superior's position. I was not happy, disappointed and confusing over the situation but respect the higher ranking official decision.

Not even a month later I receive some very distraught words. A cadet was boasting false information that consequently reflected the Corps in a negative view. This cadet has proclaim himself as a high ranking official, Already enlisted, that the corps encourage you to join the military.

Contradicting everything the corps really is about. There are two thought In my mind. I can report this issue to the instructors but in the process lose the trust of the other cadets of snitching on a cadet, on the other I can let the cadet continue and let him suffer the consequences. I decide to stand back and let him be, If people come to me or other at his behavior I will tell them the honest truth, That the corps doesn't encourage you to join the military but to develop better citizen of character, That he is not a high ranking official nor is he our corps commander. He's just a freshman wanting attention. Eventually he was kicked out of the corps in a attempt to joke around with our instructor's personal issues and that he would disrespect the uniform by putting unnecessary items on it. that sigh of relief would not last for me. By the end of my junior year I've failed to become corps commander

I've felt a sharp pain in my stomach and the urge myself to drop everything. Everything I've worked hard for, everything I've done to wasted. Underneath of my conscious, I still believed, good will overcome evil, there is light at the end of tunnel, with my parent support and my fellow cadets. I continued to work hard, never give up and believe in me and my ability.

At the end my hard work and dedication was not wasted, I was selected and interviewed to go to a southwest leadership camp. Out of the 65 participants, individual cadets, football players, student council alike, I was chosen to be one of the top 6 outstanding leaders. That sharp pain became a warm feeling. It wasn't a suffering defeat after all, it was more of a strategically victory over everything I have done. I know it now a true leader doesn't need a title to gain the trust of the people in order for them to follow you, a true leader works among his colleagues, Motivating them, training them, make them believed to themselves, not just watch as his delegates do his job.
gabbie 9 / 19 3  
Nov 24, 2013   #2
In my path to become a good leader,lead me to some obstacles.

what lead you to some obstacles ? grammatical error -> lack subject

It begins at my sophomore year. I was given the position of Detachment Assistant of my High School a fair start

began
in

I was given the position of Detachment Assistant of my High School a fair start

it seems to me that Detachment is not an appropriate word in this context because it is mostly used in military.
a fair start ? i guess you mean the Freshmen Orientation Camp or things like that, right ?

Because of The actual commanderlack of attendance , I have given the opportunity to rise

Because + Clause
commander -> you should find another suitable word to replace
was absent that day
i was given an opportunity to show my ability

All emotions go thru my brain and I was excited, happy but also nervous

went through

successfully accomplish tasks that my superior couldn't do.

accomplished
could not do

Despite requesting to give the role to someone else he was to remain the Detachment Liaisons until the end of the year and I was given my former superior's position

being requested
Liaisons seems to be not an appropriate word

I was not happy, disappointed and confusing over the situation

confused about

I've felt a sharp pain in my stomach and the urge myself to drop everything . Everything I've worked hard for, everything I've done to wasted

have worked -> worked
have done -> did. you should use past simple because you are telling your story happening in the past
seemed to be wasted

Underneath of my conscious, I still believed, good will overcome evil, there is light at the end of tunnel, with my parent support and my fellow cadets

comma (,) -> that, and
my parents' support

believe in me

believe in myself

At the end my hard work and dedication was not wasted,

in the end
were


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