partly because he does not speak Spanish
The only thing I can infer from this part is that you know how to speak Spanish while your dad doesn't. I wish you'd find another reason as to why he brought you along. If this is the sole reason why you were suddenly whisked away to the D.R., then I feel this is really misplaced.
One man, born blind, lost his right leg just below the hip in a moped accident while his brother was driving
OK OK! There are A LOT of things happening in this sentence. It's so animated that it confused me. Please focus it more!
I never realized the miraculous effect it has on the amputees
I never realized the miraculous effect
sthey had on the amputees
or to pick objects up with a new artificial hand
or
are able to pick objects up with a new artificial hand
it changes that person's life forever
the prosthetics change that person's life forever
Solid essay. I wish it were longer with
more anecdotes about how the prosthetics look and how they've truly affected the community that you saw.