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A glimpse into the future. Harvard supplement, letter to future roommate


khld11 2 / 1  
Dec 24, 2012   #1
Essay prompt: Occasionally, students feel that college application forms do not provide sufficient opportunity to convey important information about themselves or their accomplishments. If there is something you would like us to know, please inform us below. If you wish to include an additional essay, you may do so.

I chose to write a letter to my future roommate. Please tell me if it sounds cliched or if it looks like a miserably failed attempt at humor.

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To my roommate from the not-so-distant future,

I initially planned to rant about and exaggerate my positive qualities to seem like a perfect darling but then I thought to myself "Eh, he's eventually going to find out...." So I will just really let you know how our room is going to look and feel with me and my stuff in it.

Please don't think I am crazy if you see me doing the following things:
- Attempting one-arm pull-ups or two-finger push-ups (but failing miserably) in a Bruce Lee-esque style. I am fitness-oriented and on pursuit of attaining a physique similar to that of Cristiano Ronaldo (far away from it, but hope to get there eventually).

- Activate thinking/analysis mode. After reading a book/prose/essay, I have a tendency to go into that mode. Watch for the symptoms: twisting and flipping my hair using my fingers; left eye constantly twitching; smirked facial expression or all of the aforementioned happening simultaneously.

- Cry on a Saturday/Tuesday night. That would be because AC Milan (my soccer team!) lost their match.
- Sob/weep on a Saturday/Tuesday night. That would be because AC Milan won their match.
- Constantly provoking you to start up an argument. Forgive me, but I love to debate, virtually about anything. On one instance, I was debating with a friend about why John Dillinger was tactically smarter than Captain America.

- Abruptly start doing the 'gangnam style' dance. It helps to clear up my mind.

These are the stuff I'll bring along and you will be used to seeing:
- My wardrobe. It contains a good mix of colors and styles. I am not a 'fashionista' but I do like dressing up elegantly.
- My books collection. You will see my book rack in our room arranged exactly the way it is arranged right now in my room. Here's what my top row (my favorite row!) will look like (left to right) - Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows, Angels and Demons, Nineteen Eighty-Four, Brave New World, The Wall, The Ego and the Id, Propaganda, The Power of Now and A New Earth.

- Yellow spray-paint, to spray on all of your stuff. Just kidding, it's actually something symbolic to me. I'll tell you more about it in the not-so-distant future.

I hope you are:
- Different from me. I enjoy being around people who are different from me and have views that conflict mine. That gives us more opportunities to debate (yay!).

- Skilled at various activities. Coming from a small, measly funded school, I barely had opportunities to learn anything out of the realm of academic books. I am looking forward to learning new things from you.

- A poet/good writer/grammar nazi. Ever since I first started learning English 8 years back, I have only wanted to keep getting better and I expect you to help me refine my writing style further.

- Interested in sharing TEDtalks and cracked.com articles with me.

I am sure that a wonderful freshman year waits for ahead for us *Drumbeat rolls*
Yours truly,
Roommate from the not-so-distant past
Khaled
Tsprinkles 1 / 1  
Dec 24, 2012   #2
I personally like how informative you are in this essay. One thing I would change is maybe describe the significance of the yellow spray paint? Rather than kind of blowing it off (which I don't think is your intention) by saying, "I'll tell you more about it in the not-so-distant future," I would actually describe what it means to you. That would demonstrate a certain level of thoughtfulness on your part, and I think the admissions officers would be curious. (:

If you wouldn't mind reading over my Stanford Roommate Letter Essay, that'd be wonderful! Thanks.


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