'genetics is the subset of biology' - why Columbia? "Broadening scientific horizons"

Please tell us what you find most appealing about Columbia and why.

Does anyone have any suggestions? I think the grammar is off in a few places and I feel like my essay abruptly ends. I'm also unsure of how well the essay flows.

"What I find most appealing about Columbia is the great emphasis it places on broadening the scientific horizons of its students. At this early point in my college career I feel certain genetics is the subset of biology I wish to pursue studies in. Yet, courses such as First Year Seminar in Modern Biology would introduce me to other interesting topics which I may also wish to study further. I can picture myself listening with rapt attention as Dr. Kaufman describes the migration of cancer cells, feeling skeptical as Dr. Racaniello discusses the benefits of viruses, and feeling sympathy as Dr. Morrison describes the effects of traumatic brain injury on patients. I am further drawn to Columbia because of the countless research opportunities for undergraduate students. This impresses me because it shows that Columbia is interested in helping students become the scientific leaders of tomorrow. I would certainly apply for the Summer Undergraduate Research Fellowship (SURF) because it would provide me with hands on experience of working in a laboratory. Such an experience would let me dive right into the world of scientific research and help me decide if it would be a fun and rewarding career to pursue. I also find Columbia appealing because it seeks to promote scientific literacy even for non-science majors. I can see myself making contributions to The Columbia Science Review, helping spread knowledge of new scientific discoveries, encouraging students to participate in science-related activities, and teaching my peers about the importance of science in a modern society."

Hi junersol194! Yes, overall the response is great--only a few areas that can be improved. I've made suggestions below.

What I find most appealing about Columbia is the great emphasis it places on broadening its students'the scientific horizons. of its students. At this early point in my college career I feel certain genetics is the subset of biology I wish to pursue studies in (try not to end a sentence with a preposition; instead try: "...subset of biology in which I wish to pursue my studies "). Yet, courses such as First Year Seminar in Modern Biology would introduce me to other interesting topics whichthat I may also wish to study further.

This impresses me because it showsI am impressed that Columbia is interested in helping students become the scientific leaders of tomorrow.

I can see myself making contributions to The Columbia Science Review, helping spread knowledge of new scientific discoveries, encouraging students to participate in science-related activities, and teachingsharing with my peers about the importance of science in a modern society.

I hope this help and best of luck at Columbia! :)