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'My friend forever' - give some words about someone you know well


amit agrawal 1 / -  
Apr 29, 2015   #1
The person I would know well is my friend. I know since i know about 15th year. I met him as a normal friend in the college, in started I don't like very much, but now he is my best friend.

His name is Javed. He is twenty eight years old and he belong to Muslim family, but I have never felt like he is typical Muslim. He has respected all religion, his father had been working as a Sr. Inspector in CRPF. He has educated background. Now he is a working in BPO sector, he has very good command of English and French and a bit speak Arabic as well. He lives in south Delhi, he is a single now but he is in relationship with her friend.

He is a tall and handsome person, his height about to 6ft. He has a slim and lean figure, he has curly hair and fair complex with black eyes, and he usually wear shade when he went outside. He is a quiet friendly, polite, responsible and confident with elders and younger's. He has elder brother and several younger cousins, I know he likes with play with them.

He is a very good singer, He had been performed in many places. He likes travelling and he used to discover new and interesting places. He is a very organized person and he is organizing everything well. He is a fond of food like me, we both discovered and trying different cuisine. He is a sport person, he likes Cricket and Basketball. He had been working as a basketball coach in college time.

He doesn't like arguing. He is a problem solver, when I was confused and got stuck he helped me out and taught me how to easy play with problems and how to come out it.

He is a really such a nice person and thanks to him for being my friend forever.
EF_Carol - / 145 39  
Apr 29, 2015   #2
I think your essay is basically well written, but you need to pay more attention to word choice.

I know since I know about 15th year.

Corrected: I have known him about fifteen years.

You are trying to say that you have known him, but you repeated the verb.

You need to check you verb conjugations to make sure they match the subject of the sentence, and the tense. Did it happen in the past? Then the whole sentence has to be in the past.

He is a very good singer he had been performed in many places.
You need to be more specific about where he performed, did he get paid, didthe audience like him,etc.

Corrected: He is a very good singer and has performed in many places.

Again, the verb tense needs to be consistent and match the other one in the sentence. Also, you were repetitive and that is uneccessary.

I think you wrote a nice tribute to frinship, and gave enoughdetails about your friend.

Good job!

ef_carol


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