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'you'll be my first' - Stanford Supplement B. - Dear Roommate


KymberlyAlexis 1 / 3  
Oct 27, 2011   #1
Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better.

Dear roomie,

I hope you are as thrilled as I am to be roommates! I know that over the course of this next year we will learn everything there is to know about each other, but before the time of our lives begins I thought I would share with you some tidbits about myself.

First off, I love danger. Be it bridge jumping, zip lining, rock climbing, speeding on skis/snowboards/bikes/cars/boats, petting poisonous creatures - if there's adventure to be had I want to be a part of it. Needless to say I'm a big fan of the outdoors, and from growing up in extreme Texan temperatures it will take a lot more than a little heat to keep me from going outside. Sports have been a huge part of my life growing up, so if you're ever in the mood for a pick-up game of, well anything really, I would love to participate.

The second thing you should know about me is that while I am active and outdoorsy I'm also a bit of a nerd. I love gaming. It doesn't matter if it's a board game or on some gaming system, as long as it's a decent game I'm bound to enjoy playing it. I also enjoy curling up in my hammock to read in my spare time, but unfortunately that doesn't happen very often.

I'm not a night owl, but I'm also not an early bird either. I'm usually quite organized, and I'm a little bit on the OCD side. Depending on my mood I can be loud and enthusiastic or quiet and thoughtful. My kind of Friday night could either involve an evening out with friends or an evening in with myself, popcorn, and a good movie.

Now I have a confession to make. Since I've grown up as an only child the only experiences I've had with a roommate were during camp, which was at most a week long. So really you'll be my first! I hope that doesn't worry you, because I promise you will love living with me for the next year or more.

Until then,
Alexi

Any grammar or spelling mistakes? Or am I jumping around too much? Should I remove anything?
Constructive criticism, be honest, be mean!
joeservidio 3 / 10  
Oct 27, 2011   #2
Hey, Alexi! Here are some revision I made off the top of my head while reading over your paper. You don't have to take any of the suggestions since, well, they're only suggestions. lol I really liked your paper, I would just make sure you don't stray too far off topic or scatter yourself all over the place - jumping from idea to idea. The paper really shows that you're fun and easygoing. Good luck with Stanford! It has always been my favorite school !
NeonGhost 5 / 20  
Oct 27, 2011   #3
It just sounds like a laundry list, you make the structure better and it'll be a lot better.
give some examples of how you reacted to situations or what your dorm ill look like or what you want to do with them once you get there
calvin 3 / 6  
Oct 27, 2011   #4
It just sounds like a laundry list, you make the structure better and it'll be a lot better.

I agree with NeonGhost I think you're jumping from topic to topic a little bit too much. I think a good idea would be to organize all similar ideas into groups and then it would be more organized when you read it. Good luck with standford I love that school lol
OP KymberlyAlexis 1 / 3  
Oct 29, 2011   #5
Thankyou for the input! I'm revising it this weekend so I'll try to post the newly revised one sometime soon!


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