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(the field of technology) Essay for Rice regarding why this particular field of study


k3life 1 / 1  
Oct 15, 2010   #1
Any help and criticism is greatly appreciated!

Prompt: With the understanding that the choice of academic school you indicated is not binding, explain why you are applying to that particular school of study.

I have always been a big problem solver-especially in the world of programming. I often find myself wading through a pool of countless numbers and characters that mean absolutely nothing to an outsider, yet so much to the swimmer, to look for a single problem. I am a person who welcomes any challenge and the exhilarating sensation of overcoming these challenges is the very fuel that drives my dedication.

My fascination with the evolution of human technology has drawn me deeper into the world of software. As one of the few women interested in computer science, I want to step beyond the border of this current trend and submerge myself into this vast field that is applicable in so many areas, ranging from the typical ones such as communications and entertainment to ones often unknown such as art, fashion, law, and sports. Most importantly, I feel that computer science is my path towards a brighter future, because to me, success is waking up every day to do what I love most.

The world is quickly advancing in the field of technology and in every second of time, there is always a new idea or invention created. We simply do not realize the intricate and complex details that make up the very existence of our every day technology, such as our phones and laptops. We often take for granted the ingenious minds that have made our world so advanced. Yet, as advanced as it is now, there is still much more undiscovered potential looming about in hopes of discovery. I aspire to be a discoverer of this potential and become part of a world-wide team that works to further develop our ever-growing society. It is my dream to work amidst the reigning geniuses that evolve the world into what it is today.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Oct 18, 2010   #2
I am a person who welcomes any challenge and the exhilarating sensation of overcoming these challenges is the very fuel that drives my dedication.

This sentence is nicely written, but it sort of repeats what you have already shown with the examples you gave, so ... I think you should replace this with a sentence that boldly states your intentions for the next few years. What contemporary topic interests you most in the field? State your intention, your unique approach to the field.

It is my dream to work amidst the reigning geniuses that evolve the world into what it is today.--- you can't evolve something else. You can only evolve,like, through the process of natural selection or something. So, maybe change this to the word "develop."

As one of the few women interested in computer science--- I don't think it is good to make this generalization. It is okay, though, to mention that women are underrepresented in the field. If you do that, cite your source of info.

Good luck!!!
OP k3life 1 / 1  
Oct 21, 2010   #3
Thank you very much! I appreciate your help a lot!


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