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'My family is my motivation' - help with st johns


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What motivates you? We'd like to know what activities you really enjoy. Do they tie in with any career goals? Have you won any awards or honors?


My family is my motivation. I have three sisters and one brother, and they are all I really ever had. I lost my mother when I was seven, and I rarely knew my father. My grandmother struggled to raise us, until she lost her life to cancer.As the oldest boy, at the age of eight I was the man of the household. My focus ever since I was a child was to take care of them.
I learned everything in life the hard way, and that taught me to appreciate all the little things. Waking up in the morning, being able to spend another day with my family brought me happiness. I am the first in my entire family to go to college. My motivation is to motivate my family, I want all of us to take our experiences and become something positive. The closest to any reward that I ever received was a thank you card from my sisters and brother on fathers day, and that meant more to me than any other reward that I could have received. What I gained in the process of motivating my family, was the motivation to pursue my dreams to become a social worker so that I can help families like mines.

 ME chalumeau  
Mar 25, 2012, 08:50am   #2
Enjoyed reading your essay. If you use your family as your motivation, then add ways that you have helped them. For instance,

"Every morning I review my younger siblings' homework and help them understand problems that confuse them."

"Every week I drove my sister, XYQ, to her *** practice or *** lessons."

"A typical morning routine is preparing breakfast, reviewing homework, inspecting clothes and jackets, handing out lunch money, and watching everyone brush their teeth."




My family is my motivation. I have three sisters and one brother, and they are all I really ever had. I lost my mother when I was seven, and I barely knew my father. My grandmother struggled to rare us, until she lost her life to cancer.As the oldest boy, at the age of eight I was the man of the household. I remeber packing bags at local grocery stores so that my family could enjoy sunday's dinner.
Waking up in the morning, being able to spend another day with my family brings me happiness. I am the first in my entire family to go to college. My motivation is to motivate my family. I want all of us to take our experiences and become something positive. The closest to any reward that I ever received was a thank you card from my sisters and brother on Father's Day, and it meant more to me than any other reward that I could have received. Motivating my family, gives me the motivation to pursue my dreams to become a social worker. With my degree from St. John's University I will help and inspire families like mines.
 ME chalumeau  
Mar 29, 2012, 10:45am   #4
Here's another revision. The changes are mostly superficial--commas and such.



Hi :)

Really nice essay! Very touching. =)


My family is my motivation is the source of my motivation. I have three sisters and one a brother, and they are all I really ever had. I lost my mother when I was seven, and I rarely barely knew my father. My grandmother struggled to raise us, until she lost her life to cancer.As the oldest boy, at the age of eight I was the man of the household. My focus ever since I was a child was to take care of them. Ever since I was a a child, I focused on taking care of them.

I learned everything in life the hard way, and that taught me to appreciate all the little things. Waking up in the morning, being able to spend another day with my family brought me happiness. I am the first in my entire family to go to college. My motivation is to motivate my family I aim to motivate my family members, I want all of us to take our experiences and become something positive. The closest to any reward that I ever received was a thank you card from my sisters and brother on fathers Father's day, and that meant more to me than any other reward that I could have received. What I gained in the process of motivating my family, was the motivation to pursue my dreams to become a social worker so that I can help families like mines. mine.



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