This is an essay to introduce myself. Could anyone tell me if my essay is an good introduction or not? The harsh criticism is welcomed!
Optional short essay (approximately 150 words): introduce yourself to Penn. Our aim is to better understand how your identity, talents, and background guide your day-to-day experiences.
My family is the fountain of all my happiness. Both my parents are first generation college students in their families, and from them I have received the education I desire and the great care that I may never fully pay back. A Chinese saying goes, "one loves his parents by loving himself." Through the years, I am always striving to better myself. When I wake up to greet the morning sun I prepare myself for a day's work. When I crawled into my bed, I examine if I have lived a full day. While I was writing this essay, my mom handed me a bowl of hot milk and wraped a warm coat around my shoulders. Light steam rose from the white china bowl and blurred my computer screen.
In the College, I will take the most challenging courses because I am confident of the gifts that my parents bestowed upon me. Away from my country, I will never indulge in loneliness because I have a family that I belong to, a family that I am responsible for.