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Everybody has person who impacted his or her life for the best


wejdan 1 / 1  
Jul 9, 2014   #1
Hi, I looking for your help to edit my essay. I'm just learning English, so I'm not a good writer

Everybody has person who impacted his or her life for the best. This person who must we extremely respect and have allocated for them a huge place in our heart. They are always support us and make us feel well. Perhaps they have flaws in their own but we definitely just look at their attributes. They have a plenty wisdom and a mature thinking about their life. They help us to make a decision when we feel confused. Actually they have a greatest knowledge about us than anyone else. They know how is our life going and how we have treat our problems.

In my experience, my savior (I'm not sure how can I called someone who saved me from die) has impacted my life. I was having severe depression and I was always Attempting Suicide. In one day, I went to the highway trying to die. Then, I crashed by a car. Fortunately, I didn't die but I had a Amnesia so I forget all about my failed life and I opened a new page in my live as I born again. After I crashed, someone came and helped me. The person who saved me from die had asked me to live with her until I restored my memory. The period that I have lived with her, I have learned plenty of lessons. When I got know her, I saw how much she is patient and strong as a single mother with a disable child. I have never seen anybody compared with her generous. I learned how to survive from the obstacles of life. I learned to be ambition and create a target and live to achieve it.

Now, my perspective of life has changed and I have my own dreams. I'm in the middle of achieving one of my dreams. I overcame depression.
coda - / 1  
Jul 9, 2014   #2
Just a quick correction for you, hope this help. I didn't leave any mark as to lessen my work :)

Everybody has people who impacted his or her life. These people who we must truly respect have allocated a huge place in our heart. They always support us and cheer us up. Perhaps they have flaws in their own but we should definitely look at their attributes. They have plenty of wisdom and mature thought about their life. They help us to make a wise decision when we feel confused. Actually they have great knowledge for us than anyone else. They know how is our life going and how we have overcome our problems.

In my experience, my savior (I'm not sure that how should I call someone who has saved me from death) has impacted my life. I was having severe depression and I was always attempting suicide. One day, I went to the highway trying to end my life. Then, I was crashed by a car. Fortunately, I didn't die but I had amnesia so I forgot all of my miserable life and I opened a new page in my life which can be said as born again. After the crashed, someone came and helped me. The person who saved me from dying had asked me to live with her until I restored my memory. During the period that I have lived with her, I have learned plenty of lessons. When I got to know her, I saw how patient and strong she is being a single mother with a disable child. I have never seen anybody that can compare with her generosity. I learned how to survive from the obstacles of life. I learned to be ambitious and set a target in my life and live to achieve it.

Now, my perspective of life has changed and I have my own dreams. I'm in the middle of achieving one of my dreams. I am thankful that I have overcome my depression.
OP wejdan 1 / 1  
Jul 9, 2014   #3
What a nice edit, thank you so much.

But can anybody tell me - how should I call someone who has saved me from death ?


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