First essay: In an essay of 300 words or less, please describe how your past circumstances and experiences (such as your upbringing, community, and/or activities) impacted who you are, your future goals, and your choice of major. If you haven't decided on a college or major yet, briefly explain your intentions and aspirations for your first year at Illinois.
>I have always been curios to know how different electronic devices worked. Even at a young age, I would often be caught disassembling some household appliance just to satisfy my thirst for knowledge. As I grew older, this curiosity expanded to encompass new things I learnt about. It was therefore not difficult for me to pick engineering as my choice of college major.
Growing up, I was always told that I could accomplish anything I set my eyes to as long as I never give up. I never forgot this and so I followed this advice. I made sure to never give up and always be determined in everything I do. I persevered in all things I did ranging from sports to academics to community service. So long as it was a challenge, I faced it with determination and most of the time conquered it.
My past experiences have also helped shape my character. I have gone through survival programmes, religious retreats, community service and others. These experiences have helped shape my attitude to life. As such, I am a disciplined, independent individual.
Second essay: In an essay of 300 words or less, tell us something about yourself that isn't covered elsewhere in this application, some interest or experience of your that you think the University of Illinois should know about as part of the admissions review.
>Survival Training
During my 11th grade, i participated in a programme organised by the government. It was meant to imbibe in us, the skills necessary to survive in the wilderness. This programme lasted for about 2 weeks. During this training, we were to learn skills that would be beneficial to our survival when stranded.
We started our days with early morning jogging. This was to develop our endurance. During the course of the day, we participated in different activities such as rope climbing and walking, mountain climbing, canoeing and other strenuous activities. We also learnt skills such as rope tying techniques.
Apart from this, we also developed different aspects of our character. Someone new was always assigned as team leader each day. This gave us the opportunity to Have the experience of working under a superior as well as the being the leader of the team. Most activities involved either working alone or in a group. Hence I learnt to be independent as well as being a team player.
Please help. I am not really a good writer so I need some help before i submit tomorrow.
first essay:
-First sentence: curious
-new things that I learned about
-I could accomplish anything I set my mind to as long as I never gave up. I have never forgotten this advice, and I make sure to always stay determined in everything that I do.
-I have participated in a survival programme, religious retreats, and communities service activities, among other things. These experiences have helped shape my attitude to life, and through them, I have become a disciplined, independent individual.
second essay:
-imbibe in us the skills... (don't need a comma)
-we participated in different activities such as rope climbing and walking, mountain climbing, canoeing and other such strenuous activities.
-We also learned skills such as rope tying.
-Apart from this, we also developed...
-Hence, I learned
Your essay has great content! The survival program sounds interesting. I only corrected some grammar mistakes. Good luck!
